What Pegman Saw – Last Night Nerves

“What Pegman saw” is a weekly challenge based on Google Streetview. You can read the rules here. You can find today’s location on this page,  from where you can also get the Inlinkz code. As regards the link with the location, Tallinn has some very nice restaurants – sorry it’s so tenuous!

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Talinn, Estonia | Daniel Pettersson, Google Maps

Last night nerves

She looked radiant. He was nervous, constantly rummaging in the pocket of his jacket. I gave them my best smile and a menu each.

He stammered while ordering, and checked repeatedly with the young woman exactly what she wanted.

“Would you like red wine with the duck, Margit? They would go well together. Or – how presumptuous of me to assume you want wine! – perhaps you would prefer something different altogether?”

“Red wine will be lovely, Andrus.”

She seemed to greatly enjoy her meal, but he picked at his, pushing it round his plate with his fork and leaving half of it.

“I’m sorry Andrus left so much,” said Margit as she paid. “He is ill – a brain tumour.”

Andrus pressed a 50 Euro note into my hand. “More use to you than me,” he said, white-faced.

They left.

The door had hardly closed behind them when two shots rang out.

18 thoughts on “What Pegman Saw – Last Night Nerves

  1. I like how the POV moves through this story, it put me right there with them. Loved the character revealing details and all the telling verbs that brought this scene to life.

    The last line was completely unexpected! Now I need to know what happens next.

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    • Dear Karen
      Thank you for reading and for your very kind comments. I’m glad you liked my word choice, and that it brought the scene to life for you. That’s nice to hear, because I tried harder than usual to find precisely the right verbs.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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  2. A waiter is such a great choice for the fly-on-the-wall narrator in this story. Almost the definition of a disinterested observer, he seems to see the last line coming no more than we do. A mercy killing? A double suicide? A coincidental attack by a stranger? We may never know ( unless you write it) But from Andrus’ behavior, I’d say he definitely knew what was coming.

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    • Dear Andi
      You’ve just made my day!
      You are exactly right. All the narration is by the waiter, as he hands out menus, takes orders, watches discreetly so as to know when to clear the course, and of course, the shooting takes place immediately after they’ve left, so he’s well within earshot.
      And, yes, it’s a double suicide. My version is that Andrus has only days to live, and they will become increasingly awful; Margit is determined not to survive his passing. They are passionate about food, so they have a last gourmet meal, then shoot themselves simultaneously through the heart.
      Thank you so much for your detailed comments!
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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  3. This is very moving Penny. How careful they are with each other, how you feel something awful hangs in the air before we know it. This is no casual meal, everything has to be right. I too wondered if the shooting was a third party, an assassination perhaps, but your comments tell me there was only ever going to be one outcome for this night. Loved the title too. Well done

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    • Dear Kelvin
      Thank you for reading so carefully and commenting. It’s not so much a mercy killing as a double suicide. My version is that Andrus has only days to live, and his suffering will become increasingly awful. Margit is determined not to survive his passing. They are both passionate about food, so they have a last gourmet meal and then shoot themselves simultaneously through the heart.
      Andrus, whose death from cancer is inevitable and imminent, is nevertheless scared stiff, hence his obvious nerves. Margit is in that curiously exalted state when you are about to make a great sacrifice, and it’s such a big deal that you feel euphoric about it.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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