Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz (Join the Party) on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!
PHOTO PROMPT © J Hardy Carroll
Temptation
“You alright, Martha?”
I nod, make an effort to smile. Yesterday, the hospital gave me the Bad Diagnosis. Nothing they can do. Weeks, not months.
I sit at the check-out; might as well be at work as anyplace else.
My heart sinks. Mister Asshole is in line. Why does he always pick me? Today, he’s worse than usual. “The ‘Best Before’ date is today; give me a discount.” “The prices on the shelves are wrong; I should only pay the marked price, come look at the shelf.”
I sigh, remain polite – and leave the loaded pistol in my handbag unused.
Dear Penny,
Oh I love this. I’ve been a cashier and there’s at least one in every crowd. So much story in your 100 words. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly. I’m glad the story felt authentic to you!
Shalom
Penny
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Oh just shoot him, Penny, you know you want to!
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Damn right I do, CE! But at heart I’m just a people pleaser, so he gets to live – this time!
Thank you for reading and commenting.
With very best wishes
Penny
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That’s America for you. You never know who’s packing. Great story.
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Dear Josh
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked the story.
With best wishes
Penny
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Every time he spins the chamber that bullet gets closer. Nicely done menace, Penny
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Dear Neil
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked the menace!
With very best wishes
Penny
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I’ve worked a grocery store cash register back in the days before computers. There were people who always came in with a bellicose attitude, determined to find something to fuss over. You learn to roll with it 🙂
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Dear Linda
Thank you for reading and commenting. Although I never worked cash register, I’ve done people-facing jobs – and some people can be very aggressive and unpleasant. On one occasion I was accused of being a corrupt, self-serving lackey who took bribes. As you say, you roll with it!
With best wishes
Penny
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Good grief. The language we use to degrade other people defies logic.
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There’s at least one such customer in every store, ain’t there?
People often forget that cashiers have lives, worries, aches, feelings, needs… A few months ago I saw one of the cashiers in my neighborhood supermarket standing behind her register, very visibly pregnant, massaging the small of her back. I asked her if it’d help her to be seated. She nodded but glanced in the direction of the manager. I know how it goes — sometimes cashiers aren’t allowed to sit, or there isn’t any way for them to do so, which in effect makes it so they must stand.
I went to the manager in his little windowed box after I’d paid for my groceries and asked – as kindly as I could – if he could please supply her with a chair or something of the like. “I see her and I think of my pregnant niece,” I said, “and I hope where she works they let her sit … a pregnant lady really should not be standing for so long.” The manager mumbled something about change of shifts and her not having asked. I smiled again and said “Perhaps she didn’t have time to ask when her shift began, but I do thank you so much for taking care of it.” … He sort of nodded an assent and when I poked my head in the next day, she grinned at me. She had a folding bar-stool-height-chair thing.
For the record, I don’t think the manager was cruel. I think he was clueless. Small things matter.
I hope someone offers a small kindness to the cashier in your story. And I hope her loaded gun remains unused.
Na’ama
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Dear Na’ama
Thank you for reading and commenting. What a lovely thing you did when you helped that lady at the check-out!
I, too, hope Martha’s gun remains unused.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Thanks Penny. I think anyone could’ve done that and I’m sure many women (and many men who support women) would agree that it is a small thing to do, not much different than getting up to give a seat on the subway or bus.
🙂
Na’ama
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You, Na’ama, are the best!!
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Awww! Thank you, dear Dale.
I think it was just common sense, but I’d take the ‘best’ anyway … 😉
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I’m not putting any money on her not indulging herself before she reaches the end of her journey. After all, what does she have to lose? Well done.
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Dear Sandra
Thank you for reading and commenting. I certainly wouldn’t bet the farm on her not indulging herself!
With very best wishes
Penny
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A lifetime of being patient, tolerant, and non-violent can’t be negated over a terminal diagnosis. May she go peacefully.
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Dear Jade
Thank you for reading and commenting. Your response put a big smile on my face, because you’ve understood perfectly what I wanted to say! May Martha indeed go peacefully.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Penny, you are welcome. I liked your story and am glad to have understood where you were coming from.
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Anyone who has worked in a shop or restaurant knows this feeling! Fortunately very few do or say what they really want to to people like Mister Asshole. I’m glad she left the pistol alone, I think she would have regretted it if she had been tempted.
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Dear Iain
Thank you for reading and for your kind comment. I’m sure you’re right that she would have regretted using the gun.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I applaud her for still being her lovely self, not giving in to temptation, not going out in a hateful flash but with dignitiy. I’m one of the asshole customers who complain when the bill isn’t right, but I usually grab someone at the information desk or ask the cashier who can help me with the inconsistency.
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Dear Gabi
Thank you for reading, and for such a lovely warm, humane comment. Yes, Martha was wise to choose the peaceful response. Her action made the world just a little bit better.
I don’t think it’s asshole behaviour to complain when the bill isn’t right, as long as one is courteous and treats the cashier with dignity!
With very best wishes
Penny
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I didn’t expect the gun. And now there are so many questions. Does she always carry, or is this related to her diagnosis. Is it intended for herself should the going get rough? Will she truly be tempted, since she already has a life sentence, to exterminate the assholes? Provocative!
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Dear D
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you found the story thought provoking. You’re asking just the sort of questions I hoped my story would prompt – thank you!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Oh my, thought provoking for sure!
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Dear Donna
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you found the story thought provoking.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Needs a lot of courage to go to work after a bad diagnosis. If you have only few weeks, why not tolerate the irritating customer? Who is this loaded gun for?
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Dear Abhijit
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Isn’t it interesting that while most of us wonder why on earth a check-out lady would carry a loaded gun, citizens of the USA don’t find it worth questioning? It’s commonplace to them.
There are many reasons why you might decide not to tolerate the irritating customer if you only had a few weeks to live. Nothing that’s likely to happen to you as a result is going to be worse than what you already face, so why not let them know how you feel? Or shoot them? (Yeah, well that’s going a bit far, but it makes the point, doesn’t it?)
With very best wishes
Penny
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She may well use it – after all, she’s nothing to lose. I’m using the self-serve check out this afternoon just in case!
My tale – The Flag
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Dear Keith
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yeah, the thought that the cashier might be carrying is about the only thing that would drive me to use the self-serve check-out!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Well done, Penny. I could feel her giving up on all and that, no matter how satisfying in the moment it could be, was not worth the effort.
So sad.
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Dear Dale
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m sure Martha made the right decision not to shoot the man.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Mister Asshole had a lucky escape. Or is the bullet for her…?
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Dear Ali
Thank you for reading and commenting. Martha habitually carried a firearm, although I don’t expect she could give you a reason beyond, “Well, it’s for self-defence, of course.”
With very best wishes
Penny
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What a good lady… such a temptation, to do what you want without facing the consequences but maybe Mr Asshole is loved by his Chihuahua
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Dear Bjorn
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, you’re right, Martha was, at heart, a good person.
With very best wishes
Penny
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He better hope she stays at home tomorrow. Nicely done.
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Dear Jo
Thank you for reading and commenting. Who knows? If she overcame a temptation to shoot him, perhaps she’ll leave the gun at home in future?
With best wishes
Penny
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The world seems to be filled with those types of people. Good for her to keep the loaded pistol in her bag. Wouldn’t want to make an already bad day worse. Well written story as always!
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Dear Brenda
Thank you for reading and for your kind comment. Yes, I think she did well to control her anger. The world is a slightly better place as a result!
With best wishes
Penny
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I know, no matter how much you want to blame Mr Asshole, it’s not his fault. Maybe if you tell him your woes, he’ll help – dream on.
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Dear James
Thank you for reading and commenting. It was probably the way he was brought up…
With best wishes
Penny
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A good story and well written, Penny. There’s one man who’ll never know how close he came to “lights out”. —- Suzanne
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Dear Suzanne
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, you’re right, he’ll never know. I wonder how many times such moments occur in an ordinary life?
With best wishes
Penny
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Probably more than we’d like to think. —- Suzanne
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Ah, the joys of working with the public – how many days I’ve felt like this … Your story is a personal drama, a character study and possible opening for a thriller – not bad going in 100 words! Perfectly paced and structured, you capture character and context succinctly without the story feeling hurried or cluttered. Brilliantly done, Penny
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Dear Lynn
Thank you for reading and for such generous comments. I’m absolutely delighted that you enjoyed the story so much.
With very best wishes
Penny
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My pleasure, Penny 🙂
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he’s not worth a bullet. like they say, if you don’t like it, change your liking. or better quit and find another job. 🙂
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Dear Plaridel
Thank you for reading and comment. I think Martha will try to focus on living each precious day left to her as fully as possible.
With best wishes
Penny
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Penny, they’ll need a mop and bucket in the checkout area if she actions her thoughts. What a difficult situation, highlighting that we really never know another person’s struggles.
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Dear kzmcb
Thank you for reading and commenting. No, we never know another person’s struggles. We should tread lightly and respect everybody – even the assholes of this world!
With best wishes
Penny
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I wonder why she had a pistol in her handbag. Was it for self-defense, or was she planning to kill herself? In Martha’s place, with only a few more weeks to live, I doubt I would’ve resisted the temptation to shoot Mister A-hole. I worked in customer service for several years, and encountered my fair share of rude, disrespectful characters.
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Dear Magarisa
Thank you for reading and commenting. Martha habitually carried a firearm, although I don’t expect she could give you a reason beyond, “Well, it’s for self-defence, of course.”
With best wishes
Penny
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Dear Penny,
I suppose Martha lives in the U.S., specifically in a state where many others habitually carry handguns. Your story raises the interesting question of how common it is for people to continue acting in an ethical and lawful manner when facing impending death. For those who perform illegal and/or unethical acts in the face of death, one can conclude that only the fear of earthly punishment prevented them from carrying out such acts earlier.
Best wishes,
Mags
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Dear Mags
I love when I get comments like this! It shows that the story has sparked serious thought, and many of my stories aim to do that. In fact, the initial story idea was exactly that thought – if there was little or no chance of significant punishment, how many people would avoid committing an anti-social action? My own answer was that I felt a large majority wouldn’t commit the anti-social act for all sorts of reasons. Being good people is one reason, of course. Then there’s peer group pressure; apprehension about supernatural judgement; fear of humiliation probably comes into it with some people. There’s a raft of reasons.
Life and people are fascinating, aren’t they!
Once again, thank you for your comments!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Dear Penny,
In my first comment, I wrote that I probably wouldn’t be able to resist the temptation of shooting someone who was rude to me if I had only a few weeks or months to live, but now that I think about it, I don’t think I would actually shoot the person. I have always avoided inflicting pain on others, so why would I suddenly start doing so?
Yes, your story has certainly sparked serious thought.
Best wishes,
Mags
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Dear Mags
I confess that I raised my eyebrows when I read your original comment that you would shoot the A.Hole! You hadn’t seemed particularly belligerent in the past! It seems much more in character that you wouldn’t shoot because you would want to avoid inflicting pain. I like you better for your compassion!
With very best wishes
Penny
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You highlight well the danger of carrying guns. A few days ago I sat talking with a gentleman who was terminally ill, only a few days to live. So very sad, this was story well told
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The first thing I appreciate is that the customer’s complaint is about date, time, which she’s run out of. I also appreciate that even though she’s literally at the end of her rope, she doesn’t inflict pain on others. Very well done!
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