Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers – Act of Faith

This is a story for the flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. We are given a photo prompt that is kindly photographed by our participants and approximately 75-175 words with which to create our stories. It’s fun and everyone is invited to participate. For more information, click HERE.

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This week’s photo prompt is provided by Jade M. Wong. Thank you Jade!

Act of Faith

“Oh. It’s you. I might have guessed. Come in, Dave, come in.”

Dave shuffled past Father Joe into the presbytery. Joe wrinkled his nose.

“Would you like food first, or a bath?”

Dave blinked as his eyes adapted from the pitch-black night, but he said nothing. Father Joe sighed.

“Come into the kitchen, then. Bacon sandwich suit you?”

Dave grunted. Joe sighed, inaudibly. Dave had always been taciturn.

A tantalising aroma of frying bacon filled the kitchen.

“I expect you need a bed for the night?”

Dave nodded.

“Then you have a bath first.”

Dave scowled, but nodded again.

It was eleven o’clock before Dave was fed, bathed and arrayed in an old pair of Joe’s pyjamas.

“Will you say your rosary before you sleep? Would you like me to say it with you?”

Dave nodded. Father Joe recited the prayers in firm, compassionate tones. Dave mumbled. They prayed together, the father and his illegitimate son.

Word count 156


26 thoughts on “Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers – Act of Faith

  1. Well done! This was very well written and I could see these two, and their tentative connection, including some of the clues (in 20/20 hindsight) for the relationships of ‘father’ and ‘son’ that was more than the church-father one. Nice! BTW, I followed you to this new prompt and submitted one myself … Thanks for the tip! Na’ama

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  2. Father Joe must be applauded for not rejecting his son. He is feeding him and giving him a shelter. The story has this surprising twist in the end. Nicely done.

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  3. Wow! I wasn’t expecting that last line. I love that. For with that ending, you’ve thrown the past open for us, made me want to learn how it happened, where, under what circumstances. Was Father Joe a priest at the time of Dave’s conception? What’s Dave’s story? Is his mum still alive?
    You spun a simple-seeming tale, then added that layer of dark complexity at the end to leave us with. Really great story Penny

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