“What Pegman saw” is a weekly challenge based on Google Streetview. Using the location provided, you must write a piece of flash fiction of no more than 150 words. You can read the rules here. You can find today’s location on this page, from where you can also get the Inlinkz code. This week’s prompt is Coniston Water, which is in the Lake District of England.
Coniston Water, Lake District, England © Google Maps
Swallows and Amazons
Only six years ago!
It was a day just like today when the four of them set off up the hill. The weather forecast was set fair. The early morning sun sharply delineated every rock, every leaf, woke pastel shades of sage and lilac from the rocky crest.
How clearly I can see them! John at the front carrying map and compass and wearing his ‘responsible’ face; Susan with a rucksack containing their provisions – ‘pemmican’ sandwiches and lemonade, I think; Titty, looking to Susan for her example; and little Roger with his make-believe cutlass.
And now we’re at war.
Susan has just become a VAD.
Titty is still at school, but spends her spare time sending comforts to the troops.
Roger, thank God, is too young to fight; I pray this war will be over soon.
I look down. The telegram from the Royal Navy is blurred by my tears.
Great story, Penny. The eve of war is a dreadful time indeed.
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Dear Josh
Thank you for reading and commenting. WW1 took so many lives, over 40,000 of them being British seamen. So many families were bereaved.
With best wishes
Penny
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This is so sad, so moving. That little tribe of children from Swallows and Amazons thrown into the horrors of WWI. A wonderful idea, to see them march off on another trek, their childhoods intact, then snap to wartime, with that sense of innocent adventure being stripped, even from the youngest children. And what of poor John? That telegram makes me fear the worst. Wonderful writing, Penny
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Dear Lynn
Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful comments. You’re right about John. He followed his father into the navy, and is missing in action, presumed drowned. To reference Swallows and Amazons again, he was no duffer, but he drowned anyway. (Just in case you don’t remember, their father gave permission for them to sail the lake and camp on Wildcat Island with a telegram which said “Better drowned than duffers. If not duffers, won’t drown.”)
Thanks once more for your encouragement, Lynn
With best wishes
Penny
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Ha! What an Edwardian sentiment that is – ‘better drowned than duffers’! I didn’t remember that. Your sad tale was made all the more chilling by using familiar characters. Great idea.
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I read about the book series when I was doing my research on the lake but must have stopped short of the World War I connection.
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Dear James
Thank you for reading and commenting.
I don’t think you missed anything; I don’t think there’s any specific connection with WW1.
Coniston immediately made me think Swallows and Amazons (my generations Harry Potter!) and I found myself thinking about the (fictional) children’s mother. And then I thought about the children growing up, and the world they might inhabit…
To be honest, I didn’t even check whether the timing fitted with WW1; but I felt that didn’t matter. It doesn’t even matter whether the reader knows anything of Swallows and Amazons, because the story stands on its own, I think.
With best wishes
Penny
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Love this, Penny… the innocence of youth destroyed by war… And John… my eyes teared up too…
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Dear Dale
Thank you for reading and commenting. And thank you for being so moved; that’s a very warm and open response.
With very best wishes
Penny
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The War changed everyone’s simple and comfortable life to something ugly and complex. A lot of fathers and brothers were lost in the RN. So tragic. The contrasts of your story really bring out the cost of the war.
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Dear EagleAye
Thank you for reading and commenting so thoughtfully.
War is always costly. What wars are our nations involved in? And how can we stop them?
It’s not really a complex issue at all. Peace is men refusing to fight, and working to persuade others to do likewise.
Sorry! This is the political issue I carry a soap-box for!
I really appreciate your comments on my story – thank you!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Totally understand. What if they held a war and nobody came?
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I’m not familiar with the Swallows and Amazons mentioned in the comments, but I thought the story worked perfectly fine on its own without prior knowledge. You painted such a poignant memory of better times, the children innocent still in an innocent age, looking back from a tragic vantage point: very touching!
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Very nice tableau with the children so full of purpose. Love the phrase “woke pastel shades of sage and lilac from the rocky crest.” Love John’s responsible face and the irony of him being the one first taken. And youre right: without the least knowledge of the book series, i still found it powerful.
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Dear Andi
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed the descriptions and found the story powerful.
With best wishes
Penny
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Oh, Penny! I do believe this is one of your very best. The children, their names, what they carry. I could almost hear music and laughter. In a heartbeat, time passes then that end line. WOW!!!!
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Dear Alicia
Thank you for reading and for your very kind comments. The story was born out of my passionate hatred of war, and I expect that’s why it comes across powerfully. I’m delighted you think it’s one of my best; I was fairly pleased with it myself!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Had a Famous Five feel to it too, Penny, which is no mean feat. That poor mother. She is so distraught, yet I feel she is also proud of her children’s sacrifice and patriotism. A great read, as always.
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Dear Kelvin
Thank you for reading and commenting.
Yes, John’s mother probably was proud of her son’s sacrifice. But the bitterness of her loss will always be there.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Heartbreaking Penny and I loved the descriptions and colors of the first para!
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I got such a chill reading this. The love and loss are so authentically portrayed. Lovely writing.
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So sad and touching. A wonderful write.
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