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PHOTO PROMPT © Björn Rudberg
Friday Fictioneers – Edge Play 180321
Katarina stopped at the ‘Keep out’ sign.
“What a shame!”
“Come on!” Nils laughed at her hesitation. “Is this the woman who abseiled down the Kista Science Tower?”
The rough track climbed steadily. A riffle of tiny pebbles trickled down the precipitous slope above them.
Nils felt surreptitiously in his pocket and concealed something in his right hand.
“Let’s sit for a moment.”
They sat side by side on the edge of the path, feet dangling over one thousand metres of clear air.
“I love you,” said Nils, opening his hand – and the sun woke fire from the diamond ring.
Followed by an ‘oops!’. Romantic, but risky.
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Dear Susan
Thank you for reading and commenting!
With best wishes
Penny
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The conjuction of similar sounding riffle and trickle tripped me. Otherwise a real “aww” moment
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Dear Neil
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you thought it was an “Aww” moment.
I’m interested that riffle and trickle tripped you; I’m not sure I can see why in this specific example. However, I’ve made a mental note to be cautious about such things. I very much appreciate your concrit.
With best wishes
Penny
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The riffle of trickling pebbles could have signified danger ahead – someone was maybe there?
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Dear Dale,
That’s exactly what I had in mind!
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I think it’s the near internal rhyme of the two words, but also perhaps not the proper use of “riffle”?
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I replied to the wrong comment (sometimes confused as to which “reply” goes to which comment 😦 .) I mean to reply to Neil’s. But now, after reading Dale’s and yours I see the meaning you were going for.
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Such a sweet story.This certainly beats proposing on a Jumbotron at a sports game.
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Hi Josh
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you think it’s a sweet story.
With best wishes
Penny
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Dear Penny,
Such a creative, if not precarious, proposal. No doubt this is going to be an exciting relationship. Lovely story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
Shalom
Penny
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Love the imagery here.
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Dear Yarnspinnerr,
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m pleased you loved the imagery.
With best wishes
Penny
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Very romantic Penny 🙂
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Dear Iain
Thank you for reading and commenting. I expect Katarina was thrilled 🙂
With best wishes
Penny
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Don’t drop the riiiiiiiiiinnnnnnnggggggg!
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Dear CE
Thank you for reading and commenting. I wonder if you’d hear the ring hit the rocks below? I expect Nils slipped it onto her finger quickly, before either of them could drop it. TBH I’m more concerned that they’ll kiss passionately and forget where they are…
With best wishes
Penny
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🤣
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Very vivid description, and I like the diamond produced at the end. Sounds like she has an interesting future with him.
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Dear Jilly
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you thought the description was vivid. I think they’ll have exciting and I hope fulfilling lives together.
With best wishes
Penny
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congratulations to them
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Dear Larry
Thank you for reading and commenting. You are hereby invited to the wedding!
With best wishes
Penny
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Thanks Penny I’ll make sure I try to make it
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may I come too?
I will get the dancing started if that needs a kick start (kidding)
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wow, what a twist! I feared worst. They did not pay attention to the sign … they put themselves in danger. But it was their decision and they seem to love each other as they are, that’s the most important thing.
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Dear anie
I’m glad you enjoyed the twist. Some people like danger, don’t they? I think Nils and Katarina are quite well suited to each other!
With very best wishes
Penny
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yes they seem to go well together … I would probably be more anxious, well, I mean, perhaps it depends …; )
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Always good to read a bit of harmless fluff. This was a sweet tale, Penny. I just hope he doesn’t drop the rock from the cliff.
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Dear Varad
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’ve written a few grim stories recently. I felt like writing one where the characters finish the story happy – and alive!
With best wishes
Penny
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Tee hee … I know how you feel. A little HEA tale does give a light feeling when we’ve written some sombre work … I liked this bit of fluffy fun too (although no-one told them about the impending doom of the landslide which will now prevent them from retracing their footsteps 😱😱😱).
Sorry… had too many coffees this morning. Brain working overtime 🤣💫
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I hope they find a less risky place for him to put that ring on her finger–that’s a long drop 🙂
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Dear Linda
Thank you for reading and commenting. Danger is what gives them both a buzz! Besides, it’s not as dangerous as it looks – provided they keep their minds on staying safe!
With best wishes
Penny
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Oh wow! That’s the scene my character wanted! 😊 What a lovely romantic reprieve.
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Dear Jan
Thank you for reading and commenting.
My character got what she wanted, but I suspect yours had more fun! Still, they were both happy endings, and I’m sure one day your character will be given her ring, and mine will enjoy making love in the open air!
With best wishes
Penny
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“sun woke fire”
when that line came I felt the young love joy! ahhhhh
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Dear Yvette
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you felt the young love joy. We never forget that moment of commitment, do we?
With best wishes
Penny
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🙂
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I had to laugh at the abseiling from the Kista Science tower… I see it from my office every other day, and my wife eats lunch there every day… we have never considered abseiling, and we never walked far past that sign either
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Dear Bjorn
Thank you for reading and commenting. I saw it was your photo, guessed it might be Sweden, and wrote accordingly. I’m glad abseiling from the Kista Science Tower gave you a laugh!
With very best wishes
Penny
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The trouble with these wild proposals is the work it will take to make sure the marriage itself remains just as exciting! But awwww 😉
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Dear Dale
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, marriage is more about security for children than excitement for adults! But I expect they’ll find a way.
With very best wishes
Penny
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😊
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the sun woke fire from the diamond ring. Lov this line. It makes the story all that more romantic.
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Dear Alicia
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad my words conjured up the romance for you!
With very best wishes
Penny
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I am wondering what would have happened if you’d had another ten words to add to the end! Nice one Penny.
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Dear Keith
Thank you for reading and commenting. Possibly I should have eked out ten words to reassure my readers that the couple moved safely away from the edge and then kissed passionately!
With best wishes
Penny
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You set the stage well for an ominous ending. It sounds like these two like to live on the edge (pun intended).
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Dear Russell
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, I set the stage for an ominous ending so that I could overturn it with a happy one!
With very best wishes
Penny
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That feeling in his pocket could have gone another way, but I’m glad you chose the sweet option! A lovely story and a grand happy ending.
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Dear Lynn
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, feeling in his pocket was another attempt to build the expectation of a violent end. I wanted the biggest contrast I could achieve between expectation and the happy ending. I’m glad you enjoyed the sweet option!
With very best wishes
Penny
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I think you achieved that very well Penny! My pleasure 🙂
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I was expecting the worse. And you delivered the best. Lovely!
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Dear Sandra
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’ve made my day, telling me you were expecting the worse, and got the best. I’m really pleased it worked!
With very best wishes
Penny
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a lovely tale of romance at their favourite place.
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Dear James
Thank you for reading and commenting. Your comment gets to the heart of this story; their favourite place is on the edge.
With very best wishes
Penny
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The ring and the rocks. I hope they have a happy future. I liked the last line Penny “the sun woke fire from the diamond ring.”
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Dear Norma
Thank you for reading and commenting. I think they’ll have a happy future because they’re compatible. They may also have a joyful future, because of the ever-present proximity of tragedy. I’m glad you liked the last line. I love sparkly things!
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Perhaps the element of danger, or seeking it out, will keep them on their toes in their relationship.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I think you’re right; they’ll keep the fire alive with risk.
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Argh… don’t drop it! 😃 A nice little tale!
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Dear Anna
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, dropping the ring would be expensive…Mind you, I’m even more alarmed at the thought that they’ll kiss passionately and forget where they are!
With best wishes
Penny
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Marriage is quite an adventure. Very appropriate.
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Dear Ann
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re right – marriage is a big adventure.
With best wishes
Penny
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you left us dangling on the precipice of suspense. did she accept? what could’ve happened if she declined?
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Dear Plaridel
Thank you for reading and commenting. Of course she accepted!
With best wishes
Penny
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They’ve started this relationship on the edge, literally, let’s see which way they fall.
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Dear Anurag
Thank you for reading and commenting. Initially, of course, Katarina accepts. Then they must decide where to honeymoon. I wonder where they’ll go?
With very best wishes
Penny
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How lovely to be connected with you today … loved your interpretation and fabulous wording ‘fripple of pebbles’ is stunning … i look forward to reading further pieces by you 🥂🌸
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Dear Viola
Thank you for reading and commenting. What a lovely comment, too – I’m blushing!
As you probably spotted, I’m using ‘riffle’ in its onomatopoeic sense, but it’s borrowing resonance from its meaning as a gravel bed in a river.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I loved the use of the word – I could ‘hear’ it 🥂🌸
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I meant your word riffle’ of pebbles .. forgive me! (I’ll keep mine for use later, ok? 🤣🤣) x
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😀 🙂
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Boy … he really took a chance, asking her right there on the edge. A whole story of things that could have happened popped into my head. But, the most important thought about your story, Penny, was the fact that he wanted to marry her. He’s really romantic, for sure. Now … I want to know if they get married? Do they have a big wedding? Do they make it off the mountain? LOLOL Great write !!!!
Isadora 😎
ps – love that CE said don’t drop the rriiinnnggggg. Hilarious!!!
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Dear Isadora
Thank you for reading, and for your lovely comments. The author’s answers to your questions are yes, she accepts. Yes they get married, but I don’t think it’s a posh wedding, because they’ve spent all their money on adventures and outdoor kit. It’s pretty do-it-yourself, but very, very happy. They make it off the mountain and go on to have adventures. Further than that I’m not saying, as I have a feeling I may need this couple for future stories!
With very best wishes
Penny
PS I liked CE’s comment too!
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Awwww … I love this ending. I hope they have many, many adventures that create beautiful memories to last forever. 💕
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That was so romantic.
I relished the beautiful writing and the lovely, feel-good ending .
I wish your couple all happiness in their new path together.
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Dear Moon
Thank you for reading and for your lovely comment.
Once, many, many years ago, I sat next to a young man, both of us swinging our legs above a 40 metre sheer drop. Sadly he didn’t propose…! (Actually, of course, I don’t regret the lack of a proposal one bit, because I have a wonderful marriage – but ‘what if ‘ is any writer’s favourite game isn’t it?)
With very best wishes
Penny
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Love the line “sun woke fire from the diamond ring.” You built up a good deal of tension for it to have nowhere to go when he sat and proposed. In my head there was another line after the diamond ring where the small rocks turned to larger ones as the land slid……
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Dear Irene
Thank you for reading, and for your helpful comment. I’m glad you liked the line “sun woke fire from the diamond ring.” I take your point about another line. I thought I’d written a story with a twist, but, as you point out, the story feels as though it’s building to catharsis. Perhaps I should have made the couple more obviously on the verge of becoming engaged, or perhaps I should have had Katarina accept the proposal – or maybe both. I’m afraid I shan’t adopt your approach of the landslide as I’m determined my characters shall have a happy ending!
Thank you so much for the constructive criticism; it really makes me think more clearly about my stories!
With very best wishes
Penny
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You’re welcome Penny. Glad my comment helped you with your process. Cheers Irene
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Well planned proposal as well as well written Penny
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Dear goroyboy
Thank you for reading and commenting. Nils had thought carefully about how he wanted to propose!
With best wishes
Penny
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The initial build up was towards something sinister and chilling – I was happy with the twist at the end 🙂
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Dear Dahlia
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked the twist!
With very best wishes
Penny
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A sweet story. I admire people who do things like that cos butterfingers me would have dropped it for sure.
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Dear Subroto
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
With best wishes
Penny
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Sounds like a beautiful ring!
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Dear Dawn
Thank you for reading and commenting. It was a small solitaire diamond (all Nils could afford!) in 18 carat white gold. Katarina was absolutely delighted!
With best wishes
Penny
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I have one of those myself 😉
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Oh I love that last firelit line! A great tale this week Penny!
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Dear Laurie
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed the story, and especially the last line!
With best wishes
Penny
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So beautiful and romantic. Love it.
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Dear Lisa
Thank you for reading and commenting. Romance lights a fire in the heart, just as the sun did in the diamond ring.
With best wishes
Penny
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Great story- so atmospheric, strong sense of place and mood. Like the ‘rifle of pebbles’ very much, for vertigo. The last line is excellent. Well done.
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Dear Francine
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked the last line.
With best wishes
Penny
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Very sweet story- hope there isn’t a grouch with a shotgun, lurking.
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Dear Righteousbruin
Thank you for reading and commenting. I understand your apprehension about the shotgun (this is Friday Fictioneers after all!) however I’m not aware of any grouch waiting with malicious intent!
With best wishes
Penny
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I love the vivid description and the sweet story. 🙂
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Dear Sascha
Thank you for reading and commenting.
I’m glad you enjoyed the description.
With best wishes
Penny
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What a beautiful proposal!
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Dear athling2000,
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked the way Nils proposed!
With best wishes
Penny
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