Friday Fictioneers – Edge Play

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz (the blue frog) on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!

FF - Edge Play 180321

PHOTO PROMPT © Björn Rudberg

Friday Fictioneers – Edge Play 180321

Katarina stopped at the ‘Keep out’ sign.

“What a shame!”

“Come on!” Nils laughed at her hesitation. “Is this the woman who abseiled down the Kista Science Tower?”

The rough track climbed steadily. A riffle of tiny pebbles trickled down the precipitous slope above them.

Nils felt surreptitiously in his pocket and concealed something in his right hand.

“Let’s sit for a moment.”

They sat side by side on the edge of the path, feet dangling over one thousand metres of clear air.

“I love you,” said Nils, opening his hand – and the sun woke fire from the diamond ring.

102 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Edge Play

    • Dear Jilly
      Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you thought the description was vivid. I think they’ll have exciting and I hope fulfilling lives together.
      With best wishes
      Penny

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  1. wow, what a twist! I feared worst. They did not pay attention to the sign … they put themselves in danger. But it was their decision and they seem to love each other as they are, that’s the most important thing.

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    • Dear Varad
      Thank you for reading and commenting. I’ve written a few grim stories recently. I felt like writing one where the characters finish the story happy – and alive!
      With best wishes
      Penny

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      • Tee hee … I know how you feel. A little HEA tale does give a light feeling when we’ve written some sombre work … I liked this bit of fluffy fun too (although no-one told them about the impending doom of the landslide which will now prevent them from retracing their footsteps 😱😱😱).
        Sorry… had too many coffees this morning. Brain working overtime 🤣💫

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    • Dear Jan
      Thank you for reading and commenting.
      My character got what she wanted, but I suspect yours had more fun! Still, they were both happy endings, and I’m sure one day your character will be given her ring, and mine will enjoy making love in the open air!
      With best wishes
      Penny

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    • Dear Bjorn
      Thank you for reading and commenting. I saw it was your photo, guessed it might be Sweden, and wrote accordingly. I’m glad abseiling from the Kista Science Tower gave you a laugh!
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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  2. Dear Norma
    Thank you for reading and commenting. I think they’ll have a happy future because they’re compatible. They may also have a joyful future, because of the ever-present proximity of tragedy. I’m glad you liked the last line. I love sparkly things!

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    • Dear Anna
      Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, dropping the ring would be expensive…Mind you, I’m even more alarmed at the thought that they’ll kiss passionately and forget where they are!
      With best wishes
      Penny

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  3. Boy … he really took a chance, asking her right there on the edge. A whole story of things that could have happened popped into my head. But, the most important thought about your story, Penny, was the fact that he wanted to marry her. He’s really romantic, for sure. Now … I want to know if they get married? Do they have a big wedding? Do they make it off the mountain? LOLOL Great write !!!!
    Isadora 😎
    ps – love that CE said don’t drop the rriiinnnggggg. Hilarious!!!

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    • Dear Isadora
      Thank you for reading, and for your lovely comments. The author’s answers to your questions are yes, she accepts. Yes they get married, but I don’t think it’s a posh wedding, because they’ve spent all their money on adventures and outdoor kit. It’s pretty do-it-yourself, but very, very happy. They make it off the mountain and go on to have adventures. Further than that I’m not saying, as I have a feeling I may need this couple for future stories!
      With very best wishes
      Penny
      PS I liked CE’s comment too!

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    • Dear Moon
      Thank you for reading and for your lovely comment.
      Once, many, many years ago, I sat next to a young man, both of us swinging our legs above a 40 metre sheer drop. Sadly he didn’t propose…! (Actually, of course, I don’t regret the lack of a proposal one bit, because I have a wonderful marriage – but ‘what if ‘ is any writer’s favourite game isn’t it?)
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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    • Dear Irene
      Thank you for reading, and for your helpful comment. I’m glad you liked the line “sun woke fire from the diamond ring.” I take your point about another line. I thought I’d written a story with a twist, but, as you point out, the story feels as though it’s building to catharsis. Perhaps I should have made the couple more obviously on the verge of becoming engaged, or perhaps I should have had Katarina accept the proposal – or maybe both. I’m afraid I shan’t adopt your approach of the landslide as I’m determined my characters shall have a happy ending!
      Thank you so much for the constructive criticism; it really makes me think more clearly about my stories!
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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    • Dear Righteousbruin
      Thank you for reading and commenting. I understand your apprehension about the shotgun (this is Friday Fictioneers after all!) however I’m not aware of any grouch waiting with malicious intent!
      With best wishes
      Penny

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