Friday Fictioneers – Spring

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!

PHOTO PROMPT (C) NA’AMA YEHUDA

Spring

In this place, this tranquil place, this sun-warmed niche of brilliant colour and delicate fragrance, I can start to forget his coldness, his fault-finding, his vicious silences.

I can believe once again that a man might smile at me for pleasure, with laughter and delight; that he might hold me with tenderness. I can hope, perhaps, for truthfulness and openness – even, dare I wonder? – for love.

In this place, this tranquil place, this place of gentle birdsong and sweet, moist earth, I feel the dry seed of my spirit swell and quicken to meet the spring.  

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41 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Spring”

    • Thank you for your kind comment, Frank, especially for mentioning “I feel the dry seed of my spirit swell”. It’s always helpful to know what’s worked for a reader – and what hasn’t worked, too, of course!

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  14. Great capture of sad emotions and the peace spring and nature can bring. I’ve always found it odd to be upset when surrounded by the beauty of nature. I guess that’s why the great outdoors calms and clears heads.

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    • What a lovely comment, Linda – thank you so much. I’m really pleased that you liked the repetition. Thank you for mentioning it, because that confirms for me that the technical device of repetition has worked in the way I hoped.
      Very best wishes
      Penny xx

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  16. This is absolutely beautiful, Penny. So sensitive, fragile, damaged, and yet there is that precious seed of hope. I hope she is touched by love is a transformative way, and finds new beginnings.
    Best wishes,
    Rowena

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  18. This is wonderful! Relatable, and very real. Both in the setting, and the use of the setting, and the little universes of experiences and internal monologues that we bring with us, to every bench, to every wistful look, to every pair of pacing feet or closed eyelids in the sun. Lovely. (I’m late to the reading party this week, but I’m so so glad I made it!). Loved this!

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    • Dear Na’ama
      Thank you for such kind words. I’m blushing! Thank you, too, for the critique of the technical aspects of the writing – they’re very helpful, especially, “the little universes of experiences and internal monologues that we bring with us”. The whole piece was meant to evoke a sensation of being in the moment. THIS place. THIS tranquil place.

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