Friday Fictioneers – Desirable/Undesirable

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!



He and she were in Jerusalem with their families, which you would have thought made them fairly safe from meeting anybody…undesirable. And yet, here we are, in a Romeo and Juliet situation.

There was drama, sure. He saw lads high up on Roman ruins, saw them pushing at a stone. He saw a girl below, oblivious. He ran, shouted, leapt, pushed her out of danger. The stone shattered on the ground, and a shard pierced his leg. Blood everywhere. She staunched the wound.

Only five minutes before their families arrived, but the damage was done, phone numbers exchanged.



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32 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Desirable/Undesirable

  1. Oh I love this. You’ve built such a detailed backstory just by referencing the R and J, and the ‘lads’ up to mischief, and the ‘families’. Then the punchy close. Brilliant. I hope the parallels with the original star-crossed lovers don’t continue to the tragic ending of that pair.

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    • Thank you for your detailed comment, Margaret; you’re very kind to mention the aspects of the story that make it appeal to you. Like you, I hope that the star-crossed lovers find joy rather than the tragedy of R & J.

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    • Dear Rochelle
      Thank you very much for your kind comment. ‘The heart wants what the heart wants.’ I’ve never heard it put quite like that before, and it’s true. Love can just happen spontaneously, especially that first love of our teenage years.


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