Friday Fictioneers – Keeping Promises

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!

PHOTO PROMPT © Jennifer Pendergast

Keeping Promises

Sophie fastened her seatbelt, beamed, and exclaimed, “Legoland!”

I turned the key, the engine fired and sputtered to a halt. Flat battery.

“Daddy, you promised we would go today.”

The breakdown service was efficient and an hour later we set off. Ten miles down the road everything stopped. There’d been a crash and the road was closed.

“Daddy. You promised.”

I found a different route. It went well until we hit roadworks.

“You promised,” Sophie whispered

We pulled into the Legoland car park at three o’clock.

Sophie looked earnestly at me.

“Mummy was wrong. She said you never kept promises.”

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55 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Keeping Promises

  1. Penny,
    Beautifully told. It’s almost as if Mummy had orchestrated all the difficulties to make it impossible for little Sophie’s Daddy to keep his promise, isn’t it? And so it must have struck him, but only after they finally arrived at Legoland. The story works also on a spiritual level, an allegory of how in our earthly lives our heavenly Father keeps His promises to us, whatever lies to the contrary we may have whispered or shouted in our ears even by those closest to us. He gets us where we are longing to be.

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    • Dear Dora
      Thank you for the care with which you’ve read my story. I love the way you’ve seen an allegory in it, even though I didn’t deliberately write it with that meaning in mind. Indeed, our heavenly Father will keep us safe until the end of our journey. In the meantime I praise him for the love and joy he has given me in this mortal life.

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  2. I heard every unspoken word and feeling therein. What a profoundly moving write this week. I learned very early on not to trust promises. Still hard to do. I’m sure this little girl will learn over time to trust her daddy… at least, I hope she does.

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    • Dear Bear
      I am so glad you found my story moving – and so sad that you had to learn early on not to trust promises. I think Sophie has taken a big step towards trusting her dad’s promises as a result of this visit to Legoland.
      With very best wishes

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      • She sounds awful young, and promises means so much more at that tender age, don’t they. I heard a counselor tell me once that a child who doesn’t learn to trust as a child, will never do so as an adult. I can almost attest to the validity of that statement.

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    • Thank you for your kind comment. Yes, we go through a lot to ensure our children’s long term happiness. And it feels so good when they grow up and have their own children, and we can see the love shining from their faces.


  3. This is incredibly cute and sad and painful. Good for the dad to persevere and not find some excuse for giving up. To me it was obvious that the parents weren’t on good terms any longer. I used to be the kid in the middle of a hateful and bitter divorce, and the pulling and pushing went on throughout my whole youth. This is among the worst things parents can do to their kids.

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