Friday Fictioneers – The security of wealth

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!

PHOTO PROMPT © LIZ YOUNG

The Security of Wealth

Gold, silver and crystal thrust skyward in gigantic whorls that scattered mazy gleams from a myriad brilliant points. The billionaire looked and beheld that it was good.

People, ant-like, came from the slums and worked in the hotel of shiny surfaces, cleaning, toting bags, serving, making beds, all for the comfort of the guests. And if they were lucky the ants received tips. And if they weren’t tipped, they can’t have done a good job.

And that night, the billionaire felt his heart constrict, counted his racing pulse, sweated with the agony in his chest – and died.

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37 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – The security of wealth

  1. It sounds as if those people got reasonably good jobs, where they were treated in an unacceptable manner. In spite of how good the protestant work ethic may be, it’s capable of being misused beyond belief. Capitalism too is swell but susceptible to really big trouble

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    • Thank you for an insightful comment, Russell. That was exactly the way I hoped the line would be read. I needed a way of conveying the sense of entitlement that many of the rich have, an almost god-like arrogance.

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  2. Penny,
    Well done. A nice retelling of Christ’s parable and a memorable warning to prepare for eternity: no one knows when their soul will be demanded of them, for good or ill. Everything about the story is shot through with irony, and that ironic voice is brilliant given the message, including the allusion to Genesis and the billionaire’s god-like pride in “his” works.
    pax,
    dora

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