Friday Fictioneers – Icon

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!

PHOTO PROMPT © LISA FOX

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As soon as Miles had parked the Harley and removed his helmet he heard the chanting, a thread of sound drawing him to the open door of the church.

The interior was dim, and fragrant with incense. The singing reverberated, thrilling him with reverence, as he drifted towards the glow of a hundred candles illuminating an icon.

The eyes of the icon seized his attention.

“Feed my sheep,” said a deep voice.

Miles blinked. “Pardon?” he said.

A white-bearded priest spoke to him about Jesus. Within two years, Miles had sold the Harley, and enrolled in a seminary.

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25 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Icon

  1. Penny,
    Wonderfully told. Now that’s a man who’s found his calling! Reminds me of the parables about discovering the treasure in a field and the merchant’s pearl without price.
    pax,
    dora

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    • Thank you very much for your astute comment, James. You’re absolutely right that the story doesn’t prepare us enough for the conversion at the end. Even something as little as, “Miles’ life was empty,” at the beginning would have strengthened the story considerably. Unfortunately, although I knew there was something wrong, I couldn’t identify it precisely before I needed to post the story!

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    • Dear Rochelle
      Thank you for your very kind comment. It’s been a busy month with family visits almost the whole time – absolutely delightful, of course, but I struggled for the time to produce decent stories. This one was quite flawed. I can see where it’s wrong now I’ve had time to reflect, but meeting the deadline was…challenging!
      Thank you for running this challenge so well; it must take a great slice of time out of your busy diary.
      Shalom
      Penny xx

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