Friday Fictioneers – Legitimate cause for pride

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!


Legitimate Cause for Pride

“Honey, why are we stopping?”

“That!” said Jack, pointing.

There, on the driveway of an abandoned clapboard house, mouldered a pickup with an extended passenger section.

“Sure. It’s a truck. Can we please get going? We told Mary we’d be with her by 4 o’clock.”

“I just want a quick look. No more than ten minutes.”

Helen pouted.

“Honey, it’s a truck and it’s covered in mildew. And look – there’s ivy coiling round the wheels!”

“Ah, it’s not just any truck, it’s a Vandura. Back in ’62 I worked in Chevrolet’s design department. See that door mirror? I designed that!”

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43 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Legitimate cause for pride

    • Thank you for commenting, Sandra. Maybe it won’t take too long. I’ve a hunch he just wants to run his fingers over the door mirror, feel that characteristic curve once again.


    • Thank you for your lovely thoughtful comment, Gabi. There are millions of technologists making small improvements to the stuff we use everyday – like door mirrors on cars. Nobody notices; nobody acknowledges them by name. Let’s hear it for Jack and those like him!

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    • Thank you for your thoughtful comment, Rochelle. Yes, Jack deserves the chance to examine an old example of his handiwork. I don’t think Helen minds too much – she just wants to be able to say to Mary, “I tried to get him to hurry up, but you know what men are like about cars…”
      Penny xx


    • Aww, Linda! Would you grudge him his ten minute reminiscence? Jack and many, many thousands like him have shaped our world, and received precious little recognition for it. Thank you for your comment!

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      • Having been married to one of those incredibly gifted people, I know that once they get started, there’s no end to the story. The only way I know to break through, while my eyes are glazing over from all the mechanical details he loves. I start telling him about how I learned to play the piano. . . 🙂


    • Thank you for such a perceptive comment. You are quite right. And I think in her heart of hearts Helen knows how he feels. I expect as they complete their drive to Mary, Helen will find some way of acknowledging Jack’s justifiable pride in his creation.


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