Friday Fictioneers – The end of an era?

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!

PHOTO PROMPT © BRENDA COX

The end of an era?

The café lay under a mighty plane tree in a marble-paved square. It was always busy, from dawn until well after midnight.

Giorgios gazed over the café he’d started. He thought of his sons and grandsons working the tables. He thought of his unmarried daughter Katerina, so shrewd. His other daughters were happily married with children. Giorgios smiled briefly.

His heart laboured as he wondered to whom he should leave the business.

That night, lightning felled the plane tree. The deafening crash woke Giorgios. His chest tightened until he couldn’t breathe. Hastily he scrawled, “The café is Katerina’s.”

And died.

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Note – I’m planning to write a longer version of this story and post it on Sunday or Monday. Just sayin’!

49 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – The end of an era?

    • Dear Rochelle
      Thank you for such a kind comment. I’m going to fill out the picture a little in a longer version of this story.
      I’m not sure I agree that Giorgios’ death is sad. He has children, grandchildren and great-grandchildren, and has enjoyed a long and successful – and largely happy – life. And we’ve all got to go sometime!
      Shalom
      Penny xx

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    • Thank you for such a nice comment, Gabi. I’m glad you liked the metaphor; so much of the success of the cafe was down to its location under the tree – and the efforts of Giorgios. I agree with you about the will…

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  1. Penny,
    What an empathetic story of a moment of epiphany at death’s door! Glad Giorgios was able to make his wishes known given all that the cafe represented to him.
    pax,
    dora

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    • Thank you for your thoughtful comment, Lorraine. It’s certainly possible that Giorgios favoured Katerina, but the responsibility for making the right choice weighed heavily on him.

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    • What a fascinating comment. I hadn’t thought of your reading of the story, but I can see how you get there. For the author, Katerina was not an evil witch, but for the the reader – well, I guess she could be. It’s a heck of a thought for the longer version!

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    • Thank you for your thoughtful comment. I’m sure you’re right that the ‘will’ could be contested – no witnesses, for a start – but will it be in the family’s interests to contest it? Watch this space!

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