First, an apology. I am working very hard to edit my novel, “The Owl on the Pergola”. I couldn’t resist the temptation of writing a Friday Fictioneers story, but I shall only be reading a handful of others. I’m afraid I shan’t be writing many comments.
Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!
PHOTO PROMPT © NA’AMA YEHUDA
A Winter Carriage Ride
The carriage was gloss black with purple upholstery. The horse was black with a purple plume adorning its head.
Guy’s family piled blankets around him. Maureen, his wife, snuggled close and held his hand. She felt him shaking. ‘Is this trip a good idea?’ she wondered.
The horse leaned into the traces, and suddenly they were moving, rumbling sedately through the almost deserted paths of Central Park. The black, skeletal trees were traced in a silver frosting of snow like hope – or solace.
Guy stared at them, his eyes moist.
“Thank you. I’ve always wanted to do this,” he said.
Dear Penny,
It sounds like Guy isn’t long for this world. Wonderful descriptions and touching story.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
Thank you for reading and for your kind comments. You’re right; Guy hasn’t long to live.
Shalom
Penny
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Of course it was a good idea – it sounds like they don’t have much left to lose. Good luck with the novel, do keep us updated on your progress!
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Dear Iain
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re right – the worst is already going to happen – it’s a case of when not whether. Thank you for your encouraging words about the novel!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Just as well his dream wasn’t white-water rafting or experiencing weightlessness in space. Lovely story, Penny. I’m sure the novel will be a cracker
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Dear Neil
Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly.
With best wishes
Penny
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his wished fulfilled. he could now go on in peace.
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Dear Plaridel
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re right – fulfilling a long-held desire can make it easier to come to terms with our mortality.
With best wishes
Penny
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What a beautiful thing to do for one who is not long for this world.
Good luck with your editing!
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Dear Dale
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, it’s good if we can help someone fulfil a treasured dream.
With very best wishes
Penny
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🙂
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This was almost poetic. Powerfully atmospheric. Well done.
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Dear Sandra
Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly. I’m pleased you found the story atmospheric.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Ahhh … one last thing before he will no longer be with them. A last wish, for sure.
Gently told, Penny. Lovely …
Be safe …
Isadora 😎
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Dear Isadora
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you felt the story was gently told. You’re right; it was Guy’s last wish.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Thank you for taking the time for this one. The descriptions are lovely!
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Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m pleased you liked the descriptions.
With best wishes
Penny
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I enjoyed your story. Well done, Penny.
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Dear Bill
Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly. I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
With very best wishes
Penny
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