Friday Fictioneers – Grace Notes

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!

FF - Passing Notes 200401

PHOTO PROMPT © Douglas M. MacIlroy

Grace notes

Back and forth, back and forth went the rocking chair as Lizzie waited.

Her back twinged and she grimaced.

Early spring sunshine brightened the room. Lizzie could see the cheerful yellow daffodils in her yard.

She eyed the phone. Would it ring? No, her daughter had rung in the morning. She never rang twice in a day. Lizzie told herself not to be greedy.

A bird perched on the window-ledge. Lizzie wished she wasn’t deaf.

But she heard it!

Birdsong! A blackbird’s melodious tones. A thrush. A robin’s piping.

The notes tumbled over each other.

The light grew and grew.

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48 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Grace Notes

    • Dear Bjorn
      Thank you for reading and commenting. I like your description of her ending being like a warm welcome. I, too, hope that it was the beginning of her life in heaven.
      With very best wishes


  1. Probably the most peaceful death I’ve ever read of in Friday Fictioneers, and there has been a lot of deaths. Really great writing to turn something that could be morbid into something strangely lovely.

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    • Dear Lauren
      Thank you for reading and for the insight of your comments. Your comment about Friday Fictioneers made me smile – we do tend to be a murderous lot, don’t we? I’m glad you found the story lovely, though – that’s what I was aiming for.
      With very best wishes


    • Dear James
      Thank you for reading and commenting so thoughtfully. Yes, it was sad that her daughter wasn’t there but nowadays that is always likely to be the case. If we live a long life, we must be prepared for loneliness at its end. I shall be happy if my children stay in touch (looking good so far!) even if it’s only once a week, as long as I know how they’re getting on. Lizzie knew that; it was why she told herself she shouldn’t be greedy.
      With very best wishes

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    • Dear Michael
      Thank you for reading and for your very kind comments. The over-exposed area of the photograph made me think of the light growing brighter and brighter, and that really gave me the story. You’re right about the celebration. Her death was gentle, as many commenters have noted, but yes, the feeling of celebration was strong in my mind as I wrote.
      With very best wishes

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