Friday Fictioneers – Modesty

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story with a beginning, middle and end in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz link on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!

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PHOTO PROMPT © Jean L Hays

Modesty

Faith had lost her temper and yelled at Mom. She had wept.

She groaned as she pressed the long sleeves of her best dress. Plain. Modesty wear. Not at all suitable for a Prom. Was she supposed to be so modest that no boy would look twice?

She felt even more despondent when she saw the bare arms and elegantly stockinged legs of the other girls. And were those boys laughing at her? Faith watched with trepidation as Adam – handsome, desirable Adam – detached himself from the group and approached her.

He hesitated, then, “Would you like to dance?” he asked.

 

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58 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Modesty”

  4. Dear Penny,

    Oh this puts me in mind of all the disputes my mother and I had over my clothes. One dress my mother liked in the store, I ‘hated’. At least I hated it because she loved it. Days later, after not being able to get the dress out of my mind, I asked if we could go back to the shop and get it. It became a favorite. I’ll never forget Mom’s look of triumph. 😀

    It seems that Adam is a special boy. I like the way you ended on a hopeful note. Very sweet.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Dear Rochelle
      Thank you for reading and for your lovely comments. We’ve all had those moments when we’ve had to admit that mom’s right! And you’re right – Adam is a special boy. It would have taken more courage than most young men possess to disregard the mockery of his mates and ask the (extremely) unfashionable Faith for a dance. Let’s hope it works out for the two of them!
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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    • Dear Josh
      Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful comment. I’m very pleased that you enjoyed the rhythm. As regards the ending, sometimes it’s nice to do an ending that is also a beginning!
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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  8. I had very bad acne through my teens, and it spread to my upper arms, shoulders, and back. I had to look for the covered-up dresses, which even back then were few and far between. My mom was a marvelous seamstress, though, and the things she made me were always modest AND pretty 🙂

    I love your very realistic story, and especially the gallant Adam who had the character to appreciate what he saw 🙂

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    • Dear Linda
      Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly. It must have been horrid for you having such bad acne – how lucky, though, that your mom was such a good seamstress. I’m glad you think my story is realistic. I always try to put myself in the position of my character, see what she sees, hear what she hears etc, and then choose which bits make most sense in the story.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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      • It was pretty awful, but the good news is that my extra-oily skin has kept me from a lot of wrinkles that other women my age have because of their dry skin. My mom told me that would happen, and it was pretty poor comfort when I was 15, but she was right 🙂

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    • Dear Bjorn
      Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re right – sometimes boys see more than girls believe; it can be hard for them, though, if their mates are scornful.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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  14. Dear Dale
    Thank you for reading and for your kind comment. I’m sure you’re right that Adam had spotted Faith before the dance. I confess that I wonder whether they went on to become sweethearts!
    With very best wishes
    Penny

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    • Dear Sandra
      Thank you for reading and for your kind comment. I envisaged Faith as a girl in a fundamentalist Christian family, rather like the Amish, say. I’m glad you liked the story.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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    • Dear James
      Thank you for reading and commenting. I think it’s less the appeal of fashion to Faith and more that she feels at a disadvantage in the dating game. That’s tough when you’re a teenager. She’s fortunate that Adam was brave enough to ignore his mates’ teasing!
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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