Friday Fictioneers – Lost Love

I’m sorry to have posted and read so little recently – I am making a determined effort to finish the first draft of my novel (which was originally inspired by a Friday Fictioneers prompt). You probably won’t see much of me for another month or so, but I couldn’t resist Sandra’s evocative picture today!

Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz (the blue frog) on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!

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PHOTO PROMPT © Sandra Crook

Lost Love

Here, between the indigo shades of night and the pearl-bright morning, between the sky and the falling tide, here she sat, where once she had sat with him, had kissed him, had fallen in love. She sat and listened to the hiss of the waves as they greedily wrestled shingle from the land, she listened to the whisper of a calving glacier, when a million tons of Greenland ice had shattered the sea, she listened to the echo of Krakatoa, whose eruption had rung the earth like a gong.

Her spaniel nuzzled her fingertips, and she sighed.

War is terrible.

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37 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers – Lost Love

    • Dear Neil
      Thank you for reading and commenting. It’s a helpful comment, because it shows that I haven’t been completely clear in communicating my thoughts, although the general thrust of them has obviously been conveyed.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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  1. Dear Penny,

    The image of the sea wrestling the shingle of land is stunning. So much story. So few words. Breathtaking. Having recently finished my novel (for the moment, anyway) I understand. It’s an all-consuming endeavor. All my best to you.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • Dear Rochelle
      Thank you for reading, and for your very kind comments. Thank you, too, for the encouragement in writing my novel. As you say, it’s an all-consuming endeavour. The end really is in sight now, and then it’s edit, edit, edit!
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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    • Dear Sandra
      Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly – and thank you for the photoprompt which is so evocative. It’s the Jurassic coast, isn’t it? I could have written a half-dozen different stories with that prompt, and I went with the one provoked by the reflection of the sky in the water-laden sand.
      Thank you for the encouragement to complete my novel. Yes, the short break has refreshed me – indeed, this morning I had the inspiration for the structural device to see me safely to a satisfying close to the novel!
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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    • Dear Dale
      Thank you for reading and for your very kind comments and encouragement. I’m delighted that you think the writing is beautiful. The novel needs a great deal more work in terms of editing, but I think (I hope!) I have the makings of something worthwhile.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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  2. So that’s why I haven’t seen or heard much from you! Glad to hear your novel is coming along. Keep us posted. I loved the opening lines, evocative description. Perhaps despite the loss, she was lucky to have experienced love in her life.

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    • Dear Fatima
      Thank you for reading and your kind comments – thank you, too, for noticing I was missing! I agree that she was lucky to have experienced love – it’s such an important part of human happiness.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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    • Dear Abhijit
      Thank you for reading and commenting. Your understanding of the story is very much in line with my intention in writing it – the persistence of cataclysmic events, whether in the physical world, or in the memory.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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  3. Evocative, indeed. That’s a word I really like, and tend to use more often than I should:) Your piece is full of mood, sadness, and lost hope. And as always, the writing is wonderful. Best wishes as you finish your novel.

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    • Dear Linda
      Thank you for reading and for your very kind comments. I liked the prompt, and the reflections in the wet sand made me think of a half-world, between ours and somewhere else. That turned into some thoughts about the ripples that events leave behind them, in the memory as well as the physical world. Which was a great excuse for some descriptive writing!
      Thank you, too, for your best wishes for my novel – much appreciated!
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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  4. This is so beautifully written and the repetitions are very effective. They wander from one melancholy thought to the next until they arrive, blandly and short, at the terrible conclusion.

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  5. Beautiful and evocative. Though having a cocker spaniel of my own, the only time they lick your fingers is when you are holding food 😉
    Good luck with the novel, you must write a post on the writing process to help us stragglers.

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  6. Great story Penny. I sympathise with your predicament, I’m trying to complete the sequel to my novel and unfortunately that means I have to forego FF sometimes because I know I won’t be able to devote time to commenting. Good luck, I hope it’s all going well.

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  7. Something timeless about this piece, about love and war, warmth and loss. It has a personal and also and epic scale, all of humanity’s endeavours in one small piece. Wonderful stuff, Penny.
    I had noticed you weren’t around as much and assumed you were working on your novel – fantastic! How’s it going?
    I’ve been doing the same, TBH, trying to get through one last rewrite before passing my MS onto an editor. Great to know you’re progressing. All the best and if you’re ever in Bristol … 🙂

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  8. You paint such evocative pictures with your words. I felt her longing for the one she lost and the remembering, in the sounds of nature’s brokenness, of the pain she suffered. Miss your contributions. Best wishes with your novel.

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