Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz (the blue frog) on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!
PHOTO PROMPT © Rochelle Wisoff-Fields
Edited 09:52 BST 11 October 2018
Unwelcome news
Edward pulled his shoulders back and stood tall as he walked through the farm entrance. The barn looked even more ramshackle, and the yard was dirty. Dad was still struggling to cope then.
“Hullo, Dad.”
“What are you doing here? I thought you were at un-i-ver-si-tee”
“Well…”
A low flying Spitfire drowned out his reply.
“Bloody planes!”
“Dad, they’re heroes. They’re stopping the Germans.”
“They’re frightening the bloody cattle, that’s what. Ever since they opened that damn airfield down the road.”
“Dad. I’ve er…I’ve something to tell you.”
“Curdling the bloody milk they are.”
“Dad. I’ve had my call-up papers.”
Nice story
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Dear Libarah
Thank you for reading and commenting.
I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
With best wishes
Penny
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You’re welcome, mam.
Thank you for the nice story and your wishes💐
Happy blogging👍🏻
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I think that father needs to look beyond the farm… a son in the war will keep him awake… nice details with the Spitfire that puts in a place in time…
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Dear Bjorn
Thank you for reading and commenting, and especially for mentioning the Spitfire; you’ve confirmed for me that it worked as a device for showing when the story is set. As for the father needing to look beyond the farm, yes, I’m sure that would be a healthier perspective.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I don’t like to disagree with Bjorn but, on an island during a war, farms are of crucial importance.
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Dear CE
You are absolutely right. Our farms were and are essential. It’s also the case that many farmers, even now, have a very narrow focus with an absolute priority for their land.
Best wishes
Penny
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I agree about the Spitfire – it is a great detail that tells time and place without need of so many more words.
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Thank you, Trent!
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I think Dad knew what he had come to say. Did the Brits ever say “dang”?
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Dear Neil
Thank you for reading and commenting. It’s certainly possible his dad knew what he’d come to say, but he would have to have picked it up subliminally in the greeting. Edward had just finished the first year of a PhD in Engineering, and had thought his call-up was safely deferred for another two years. But no; the authorities decided they needed him. This actually happened to my father a couple of years after the war, and he was sent to Malaya. He never was able to finish that PhD…
As for “Dang” – has anybody, anywhere, ever used “Dang”? It’s a bowdlerised cuss word! But seriously, do you think it spoils the father’s voice? It would be useful to know.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Yes, it sounds like an Americanism to me. I’d go for an explicit Anglo Saxon word, or “effing” if you prefer
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Thanks, Neil. That’s helpful.
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Dear Neil
Thank you for the tip about ‘Dang!’. It was lazy writing on my part. I’ve edited the story to use more appropriate words. I avoided ‘effing’; to me it carries overtones of the industrial North rather than the rural South-East.
With very best wishes
Penny
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call up papers?
life is about to change big time !
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Dear Yvette
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re dead right about life changing big time. We shall just have to hope that Edward comes through the war unscathed!
With very best wishes
Penny
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yes- let’s hope he returns and returns well
and your post – well you had me at “Hullo”
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Great story. The father will never change I think, he won’t show his emotion but I suspect inside he is hurting about the war and His son’s call up.
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Dear Iain
Thank you for reading and commenting. I think you’re right that the father will never change. I’m not so sure about the hurt inside. His biggest hurt – I suspect – is that his son left home to study engineering at university, and will not take over the farm. So Edward’s father is the last of a line who may have farmed that particular land for hundreds of years.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Yeah, I was a bit confused with the Dang and then the son being “called up.” Dang sounds more southern USA than British. The rest of the story was great.
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Dear Stuart
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad the confusion over “Dang” didn’t prevent you from enjoying the rest of the story. It was lazy writing on my part, and I’ve edited the story to use more appropriate language.
With very best wishes
Penny
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A well-written and bittersweet tale Penny. I can’t help wondering how the father would have reacted if land girls were sent out to help on the farm.
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Dear JS
Thank you for reading and commenting. You raise an interesting speculation. How would the farmer have reacted if land girls were sent to help on the farm? Well,,. he’s a widower in his late forties and still perfectly capable of fathering a child. His big psychological imperative is to hand on the farm to an heir, but his son Edward has taken a different route. That could be an interesting plot line to work through.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Dear Penny,
I think the war’s about to take on a different meaning for the farmer. I could see and hear this story. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
Thank you for reading and commenting.
I’d love to agree with you about the war taking on a different meaning for the farmer, but I’m not sure it will. Edward is not going to follow in his father’s footsteps. For a farmer of that period that was a really big deal. Edward’s forebears farmed that land for hundreds of years, and now he’s turned his back on it and gone to university. Dad will only just barely speak to him; in fact for a long time he wouldn’t have any contact at all. So, a family tragedy in the making…
Shalom
Penny
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“Dad” is seriously out of tune with his times.
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Dear Alice
Thank you for reading and commenting. I expect ‘Dad’ was aware of the importance of the war. However, he was obsessed with the idea that he would be the last of his family to farm the land where he lived. His son, Edward, had chosen to go to university instead.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Yeah. Looks like a bit of denial going on. And then for the son to get called up was a coupe de grace.
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it must be the news he least expected. hopefully, he’d get over it.
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Dear Plaridel
Thank you for reading and commenting. The call-up papers were a dreadful shock to Edward who had expected to be allowed to finish his university course. They were less of a shock to his father, I think.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Son is joining the Dang airforce! Dad may not like it.
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Dear Abhijit
Thank you for reading and commenting. Son will serve in the army, I think.
With best wishes
Penny
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I wonder if Dad will have a change of hearth now that his son is involved. Hopefully he’ll learn to see the bigger picture!
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Dear Ali
Thank you for reading and commenting. We can always hope for a change of heart, but Edward, by abandoning farming, has deeply hurt and angered his father.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I think the price of war in human terms is about to come home to the father. Nicely done, Penny.
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Dear Sandra
Thank you for reading and commenting. I believe you’re right. No matter that the father is bitterly disappointed that his son has chosen not to farm but to go to university instead, his son’s call-up will probably shake him.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I liked your story, Penny, but do not share the general disapprobation of the farmer. Life has to go on, regardless.
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Dear CE
Thank you for reading and commenting. The father was a curmudgeonly soul, but doing an essential job and coping with many misfortunes.
With best wishes
Penny
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Nicely done. I think the Dad was being that way because he knew what was coming. His way of coping/complaining about what he couldn’t change.
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Dear Trent
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m sure there was an element of coping about the Dad’s behaviour. He might well have guessed from the expression on his son’s face that he’d been called up.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Creative take on the prompt Penny!
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Dear Dahlia
Thank you for reading and commenting. The building in the photograph is held together by multiple steel tie bars. It prompted me to think of the things that hold families together.
With very best wishes
Penny
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The clash of two worlds. Very authentic.
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Dear Linda
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, the first half of the 20th century was a period of dramatic change, intensified by the world wars. It’s hit this farmer and his son very hard.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Well done, Penny… Agree about the Spitfire mention; missed the dang dangs but feel the bloodys (which I assumed is what replaced them 😉 ) belong!
And the farmer’s reality is being doubly fired upon, methinks. I think, in an effort to NOT say what he feels about his son’s being called up, he sticks to what he knows. Easier to handle.
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Dear Dale
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, the farmer isn’t really facing up to reality.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I happen to know a couple of farmers who have similar attitudes to your story’s dad and there isn’t a bloody war like the one in your story. I found him very authentic. Great take on the prompt.
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Dear Jo
Thank you for reading and for your kind comments. You’re very kind to say my story feels authentic. And you’ve delighted me! You’ve understood that the story isn’t about the war, it’s about farming. Edward is the farmer’s only child who has turned his back on farming and gone to university. Generations of his forebears have farmed that land. No wonder his father mocks him with the way he drags out the syllables of “un-i-ver-si-tee”. No wonder he talks at him rather than with him. It’s a wonder he’s prepared to speak to him at all. I’m so glad you realised what I was on about!
With very best wishes
Penny
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I was reading an interesting article the other day that said as Baby Boomers are retiring a significant population (10%+ if I remember correctly) are returning to farming. Some are solely looking to supplement the grocery budget while others are farming for farmers markets, specialty restaurants or other organic grocers as a retirement income. Very interesting.
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True to life, in every corner of the UK
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Dear Minister
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re very kind to say that my story is true to life.
With very best wishes
Penny
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And, then, the curiosity of how the father reacts to the news, especially when he sounded contemptuous of his son being at uni. Nicely done, Penny!
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Dear Sascha
Thank you for reading and commenting. Well spotted, that the father was contemptuous of his son being at uni. That really is one of the key elements of the story. Edward was the only son, and he had turned his back on farming as a career. Even today, few people enter farming from outside – it’s a family thing. Edward’s forebears had farmed that land for generations, and now it was all coming to an end.
I’m really grateful to you for mentioning the contempt, because it means that the device I used worked for at least one reader!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Great story Penny. The Spitfire put the ‘time’ into the story beautifully. I feel for the Dad, war is cruel for everyone, not just those who fight.
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Dear Anurag
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, war is cruel to those it kills, and sometimes even crueller to those it spares.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Nicely done. The “low flying Spitfire” turns the clock back instantly. I suspect many families had that conversation in those years.
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Dear Subroto
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, alas, all too many boys will have been called up to fight, and families will have had to bear separation and loss.
With very best wishes
Penny
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They are both going to be engaged in vital work. Farming, with the amazing help of the incredible Land Girls, was a vital part of the battle. I hope both father and son survive. They will each be proud of the other, I am sure.
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Dear Jilly
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, farming was, and is still, an essential industry. I hope they both survive too.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I can imagine that suddenly the Dad no longer cares about the cows. Such a horrid reality for too too many families during the Great Wars (1&2) and even into modern times.
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Dear Jelli
Thank you for reading and commenting. Call up to fight was the frightening reality of life for most young men during WW1 and WW2.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Both my Gr. Great Grandfather (WW1) and my Gr. Grandpa (WW1&2) as well as Gr. Uncles (WW2 & Korea) were called up. Remember well my Gran telling me about how much fear there was in the family, and she just a young girl at the time.
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I love the ‘voices’ of father and son – so much said in so few words. The understatement they both use reminds me strongly of a previous generation who were ‘buttoned up’, even about war, or the dad’s sneering about university. Well written.
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Dear Francine
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you found the understatement of the dialogue was effective.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I can’t imagine living through a war with your children going off to fight. We live in another time because of the sacrifice of so many others. Your story is moving, I felt nervous for the son and sad for the father who is about to come face to face with life-altering reality. I think someone else said it, but I think the father knew what his son was going to say and that’s why affixes a mask of irritation about something else. Maybe to delay the inevitable? Very well-written.
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Dear Brenda
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you thought the story was well written. The father may well have guessed his son’s news and not wanted to hear it, but there were many other reasons for tension between father and son.
I agree with you that living through a war where your children are compelled to go and fight must be dreadful.
With very best wishes
Penny
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A really lovely story.
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Dear Lisa
Thank you for reading and for your very kind comment.
With best wishes
Penny
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No matter how much we hate war, when it comes we have to face it. Isn’t it the worst thing ever created by us?
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Dear Priya
Thank you for reading and commenting. War is dreadful, and when it comes it’s inescapable. I think that the truest heroes are those who refuse to fight regardless of the consequences. If we all did that, the powerful would be unable to manipulate us into wars.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Edward’s dad is certainly not welcoming his son back with open arms; he makes a mockery of the word “university”. The inclusion of the Spitfire leads us straight to the reason Edward has gone to see his father. You really brought this scene to life, and you’ve incorporated so much into this short story (e.g. a strained father-son relationship, the focus of a farmer on his land, the horror of war, etc.).
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Dear Magarisa
Thank you for reading so carefully and commenting so fully. You’ve really reached the heart of my story. I’m glad you felt I brought the scene to life.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I always enjoy reading your stories, Penny.
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I wonder of this dad will now think of his son every time there is a fly over.
An atmospheric tale, Penny.
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Dear Dawn
Thank you for reading and commenting. I hadn’t thought of it before but I think you’re right that the Dad will think of his son whenever he hears a spitfire.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I can understand where the father is coming from. He had hopes that his son would be a farmer like him but the fact that he went off to university says a lot and now, he’s heading off to war. Now the father has more to deal with–there’s the possibility of his son never returning. Having a son in university doesn’t seem so bad, after all, does it? Very engaging story.
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Dear Adele
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, those were exactly the thoughts and feelings I was trying to communicate. I’m glad you felt engaged by the story.
With very best wishes
Penny
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