Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz (the blue frog) on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!
PHOTO PROMPT © Yvette Prior
Singin’ the Blues
The cigarette smoke stings my memory.
I remember evenings with Robin. We would play the ‘Moody Blues’ on his hi-fi as we sat on his single bed, our limbs tangled under a blanket, sharing a packet of ‘Disque Bleu’ cigarettes, swigging Heineken and nibbling peanuts.
In our first year at university he asked me to marry him, and I said, “Let’s finish our studies first”.
He asked me again when we graduated, but I said, “I want to complete my PhD first”.
He moved. We wrote. We phoned. We visited.
The smoke teases me. I wonder where Robin is now?
Dear Penny,
I love this story. So much crammed into 100 words with even more story between the lines. Beautifully crafted.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
Thank you for reading and for your very kind comment. It was fun to think back to those student days!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Lovely, nostalgic story. I remember Disque Bleu – hated the taste, but oh how cool and sophisticated I felt when I forced myself to smoke one! The foolishness and ‘what ifs’ of youth are perfectly encapsulated in your story, Penny.
Susan A Eames at
Travel, Fiction and Photos
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Dear Susan
Thank you for reading and commenting. Disque Bleu was the brand I smoked – as you say, it felt very sophisticated. I could imagine myself as a French intellectual, arguing passionately long into the night! And, yes, I suppose that’s foolish – but it’s also part of the dreams we have as we learn who we are as adults. (BTW I stopped smoking pretty quickly – health risks were becoming apparent, and I couldn’t afford the cash anyway!)
With very best wishes
Penny
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I totally agree with Rochelle. You fit an entire life into 100-words. Time passes so quickly.
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Dear Lish
Thank you for reading, and for your kind comment. I had fun writing this story, thinking back to student days. And time certainly does pass quickly – but I’ve been lucky and it’s left me many happy memories. And if I’m very fortunate, there’s still a bit more to come. Yay!
With very best wishes
Penny
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The road not taken. Very well done, Penny
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Dear Neil
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re very kind to compliment the story; as you know, I greatly respect your opinion.
“The road not taken”. Hm. Do you read that poem as completely serious, or as Robert Frost poking fun at his friend Edward Thomas? I didn’t intend my narrator to be regretful; the smoke is teasing her!
With very best wishes
Penny
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There are always regrets for roads we didn’t take, even the ones we knew led off precipices
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I fear I must respectfully disagree, Neil.
“Je ne regrette rien” – and I mean it.
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Smell can be such a powerful trigger for memories. Nice one.
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Dear Iain
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re right about smell triggering memories. I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
With best wishes
Penny
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I love how real this story is. So often we put things off for a future time, and we never end up getting to it.. or we lose the opportunity. Great reminder in this😊
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Dear Brandy
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked the reality of this story.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Very good – reminiscent of TS Eliot
“Footfalls echo in the memory
Down the passage which we did not take
Towards the door we never opened.”
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Dear Martin
Thank you for reading and commenting. There’s always a little bit of ‘what if…’ when we remember past decisions, isn’t there?
With very best wishes
Penny
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Lovely puff of nostalgia and heartache. That’s why you should never postpone happiness.
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Dear Anurag
Thank you for reading and commenting. I like the way you picked up the cigarette imagery with “puff of nostalgia”! I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Smell really is a strong trigger for half forgotten memories. There’s curiosity, but I somehow doubt that they want to see each other. Reality often destroys sweet memories. Great story, Penny, it hits a chord in many of us, I bet.
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Dear Gabi
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re exactly right about the couple not wanting to see each other. I’m glad the story struck a chord with you; it did with me too. I have no regrets about my choices, but occasionally I remember the past and wonder how an alternative future might have played out. One of the reasons I’m a writer, I suppose!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Well done, Madam! So much told in so few words. And there is a reason why she never said yes… and time does go by and we can sit and reminisce once triggered by a scent… Loved this.
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Dear Dale
Thank you for your lovely words! You are so right about her reason for never saying yes. I imagine her as an eminent professor, heaped with academic distinctions and honoured by the state. She’s stayed single, had a few very discreet affairs and is altogether very content with her lot. But like all of us, she enjoys a nice nostalgic wallow every now and again. Poor Robin, though!
With very best wishes
Penny
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This story sounds so real because of the vivid description of a memory triggered by smell. very well written. Enjoyed it. 🙂
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Dear Priya
Thank you for reading and for your kind comment. I’m glad you felt I described the memory vividly.
With very best wishes
Penny
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He’s probably at the Hundred Acre Wood smoking & drinking with Tigger and Eeyore.
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Dear Russell
Thank you for reading and commenting. Now I have an image of Winnie the Pooh with a spliff…I wonder if the Hundred Acre Wood is heaven for fictional characters?
With very best wishes
Penny
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Penny, your story pases muster Robin is bought alive with the French black tobacco
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(Sorry fat fingers pressed send too soon). And the Hippy-esque ambience in the room. A clever write that shows what is not on the page. Well done.😊
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Dear Ellen
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you found Robin a ‘living’ character, and that you enjoyed the hippy-esque ambience.
With best wishes
Penny
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Penny, this was one of your best–and I always enjoy your posts. The slow unraveling of that relationship was very sad.
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Dear Linda
Thank you for reading, and for responding so warmly to my story. I think the unwinding was sadder for Robin than for the narrator, don’t you?
With very best wishes
Penny
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Yes, I think you’re right.
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Missed opportunities! No point pondering over bygone. Sometime one has to make decision and stick to something one wants. If she had given up her ambition, she would have a different regret with her cigarette today.
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Dear Abhiray
You are exactly right – “If she had given up her ambition, she would have a different regret with her cigarette today”. I’m afraid poor, faithful Robin always came second after her career.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Different strokes for different people. Some may not be cut out to regular life. But why cry over bygone days?
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Even though she’s wistful, I guess she was not so sure of a long future with him. Hindsight might be 20/20, but I think she’s ok.
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Dear Varad
Thank you for reading and commenting. Robin always came second in her life, I’m afraid. I’m sure she’s ok; I’m not so sure about Robin.
With best wishes
Penny
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So beautiful. So nostalgic. The various stages of the relationship packed in just 100 words. Wow!
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Dear Piyali
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
With very best wishes
Penny
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What a beautiful human story, a balance of reality versus hopeless love.
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Dear James
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, the narrator was very practical, and I’m afraid poor Robin was heartbroken.
With best wishes
Penny
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An elegant story, so minimal put and so expressive of how this relationship works out/ doesn’t. Well done.
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Dear Francine
Thank you very much for reading and commenting. I’m delighted that you thought the story was elegant.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Wah! A tale oft repeated in real life.
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Dear Yarnspinnerr
Thank you for reading and commenting. I think (from reading Vikram Seth’s “A suitable boy”) that I’m flattered by your exclamation “Wah!”
As you say, this is a tale often repeated in real life.
With very best wishes
Penny
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A sad lesson in grabbing chances before they pass you by.
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Dear Sarah
Thank you for reading and commenting. I suppose whether you find the lesson sad or not depends on the relative importance to you of a PhD and an academic career compared with a love affair. It’s an individual preference, isn’t it?
With very best wishes
Penny
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Love the way you had time so intimate as we felt the pretzel twist led legs and indulging – to them skip stones over the years to bring us to a reflecting moment!
Many of us could insert different names – songs – and locations –
I also sense contentment (a bit) as the individual reflects back – not a “one that got away’ yearn – not depth of angst – but wonderfing – hm
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Dear Yvette
Thank you for reading so perceptively and commenting so beautifully. I wish I’d written “pretzel twisted legs” and “skip stones over the years” – lovely metaphors!
You have read this story exactly as I hoped. The narrator feels contentment – yes! And no yearning, no angst, but certainly curiosity. And, yes, many of us could claim a story like this as our own – that was exactly what I hoped when I wrote it!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Now that was so nice to read, Penny
…
I leave with a contented smile (bid adieu and wish you a nice week)
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Such unrequited love here, Penny, and regret. I like the way the emotion tangles between the two as they tangled beneath that sheet. Really well done.
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Dear Kelvin
Thank you for reading and commenting. Would there be regret, do you think, on the part of the narrator? She made choices, followed them through, made a successful academic career for herself, probably had some discreet love affairs. Suppose I had made the narrator a man? Would you have felt the same?
With very best wishes
Penny
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I sensed regret from this narrator, Penny. I am not sure what I’d feel if you made him a male. I would have to read his story and see. I wonder why this narrator is telling this story? And to whom she is telling it?
With very best wishes
Kelvin
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Okay. Back story. Narrator studied in the late sixties/early seventies. Made a definite choice in favour of academic success over marriage. Drifted away from early lover, Robin. Built a very successful career. Had several pleasant affairs. Became very distinguished, and is just about to give a very prestigious lecture to the Royal Society. She’s a smoker, and before giving the lecture she nips out the back and has a crafty ciggy, and, with her mind in idle, she feels vaguely nostalgic about Robin. Immediately after the action of the story, an official of the Royal Society comes out and says, “When you’re ready, Professor…”
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Hmmm – I would say, for what it’s worth, Penny, that your narrator is still a she and she and those feelings of nostalgia you describe could be the tinglings of regret which some professional people get when they reach a pinnacle and wonder why they have no one permanent to share their successes with. Maybe. It’s just how I feel. Hope that’s okay? 🙃
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Dear Kelvin
Of course it’s okay!
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Grand 😊
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Just an idle thought or a regret? I sometimes wonder what would have happened if I’d made various other choices.
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Dear Ali
Thank you for reading and commenting. I don’t think the narrator was really given to regret – she was far too practical. We all have “what if?” moments, don’t we? And sometimes memory brings a smile, as we remember the fervour with which we kissed, and how it was all going to last for ever!
With very best wishes
Penny
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It’s interesting what can trigger a memory from long ago. Smell is certainly a strong one. We all carry “what if’s” and “wonder where we would be if” moments. You captured that so well!
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Dear Brenda
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you thought my description of the nostalgia for young love was effective.
With best wishes
Penny
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A lovely, nostalgic tale. The details you’ve provided bring the characters to life.
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Dear Magarisa
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m pleased you thought the details brought the characters to life.
With very best wishes
Penny
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If she had really wanted to be his wife she would have been.
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Dear Dawn
Damn right she would!
Thank you for reading between the lines and commenting so effectively!
With very best wishes
Penny
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I am usually sentimental about other people’s relationships but this time when I realised she chose to pursue the PhD I was delighted. Terrific story, Penny.
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Dear Jilly
Thank you for reading and commenting. What a great comment! We definitely need more women with PhDs!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Lovely story 👍 I would like to read the unabridged version !
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Dear Narasimhan
Thank you for reading and for your happy comment! The unabridged version would be a novel…
With very best wishes
Penny
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How many of us have been there–when a scent takes us back? I loved the nostalgia of your story, Penny. Some of the scents that take me back are hairspray, coffee, rain, perfume, diesel, and yes, even cigarette smoke. 🙂
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Dear Jan
Thank you for reading and commenting. I think cigarette smoke is my most nostalgic smell, mainly because it’s only associated with my student days and I’ve come across it very little since. Other smells that trigger my memory are wax crayons – takes me straight back to primary school – and the smell of old churches. I’m glad you loved the story’s nostalgia.
With very best wishes
Penny
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A PhD who chose higher ed over relationships, and is now lonely and taken up with vices to cope with her estrangement.
That’s how I read it.
Too bad; too sad.
Randy
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Dear Randy
Thank you for reading and commenting so honestly. It’s useful feedback that the emotional tone of the story can lead you to read it as a sad story.
I’d be interested to know whether you would feel the same if it had been the man who had dumped the girl and gone on to academic success?
With very best wishes
Penny
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Wonderful story about regrets, Penny and so well crafted in just 100 words. Bravo.
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Dear Heart for Africa
Thank you for reading and commenting. . I’m glad you feel the story is well crafted.
With best wishes
Penny
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So beautifully crafted.
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