Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story, based on a photoprompt, with a beginning, middle and end, in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz (the blue frog) on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!
PHOTO PROMPT © Ronda Del Boccio
Come back safe
Tatsuya is away. Will he be back tomorrow, or next week?
I clap twice, fold my arms across my breast and bow to my household shrine, emptying my mind. A melody lures, light and shade slide slowly past each other and my fingers tingle. I push these distractions gently away, letting my mind fill with the nothingness that holds all things. The music stills and the colours fade.
When I open my eyes, I am dazzled by my rice plants glowing green with life. It is a good omen.
Kagutsuchi, please bring Tatsuya safe home from fighting the wildfires.
You create a lovely mood here, and then make it topical. That’s so clever
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Dear Neil
Thank you so much for the lovely comment. I’m blushing!
It was your reminder to me last week about the perils of an over-declamatory style that pushed me in this direction, so thank you a second time.
With very best wishes
Penny
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A clever mix of custom and topicality. Well done, Penny.
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Dear Sandra
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed the description of a Shinto/Buddhist ritual with topicality. In Japan, a person’s religious practice is often very much part of daily life.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Nice plot.
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Dear Abhiray
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked the plot.
With best wishes
Penny
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Very soothing. I was right there – some late-afternoon mindfulness.
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Dear Paul
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed the late-afternoon mindfulness!
With best wishes
Penny
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A sincere prayer always rewarding !! 👏👏
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Dear Narasimhan
Thank you for reading and copying. I agree, because sincere prayer always deepens our spirit. But we are not always given what we prayed for, of course.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Him and me, both!
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Dear Alice
Thank you for reading and commenting. Are you in an area threatened by wildfire? I hope not; that would be dreadful.
With best wishes
Penny
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I live in Montana. We have wild fires every year. It’s forest fire season right now, so the valley is full of smoke even though the nearest fire is nearly a hundred miles away and only a thousand acres large.
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Dear Alice
Gosh – 100 miles sounds quite close to me! How fast do they spread in a strong wind? And how unpleasant to have constant smoke in the valley.
With very best wishes
Penny
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This story had such a lovely tone – I really enjoyed reading it, Penny.
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Dear Susan
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed the tone.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Topical ending after a soothing piece. Particularly liked the ‘melody lures.’
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Dear Iain
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked ‘melody lures’.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Beautiful writing, Penny, which fits the mood and theme. The green rice plants really jump off the page and shout ‘life!’
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Dear Gabi
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you felt the writing fitted the mood and theme. You’re right about the plants in the photoprompt; it was their shout of ‘Life’ that prompted me to write the story.
With very best wishes
Penny
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This is so beautiful Penny! I love the part about gently pushing distractions away. It’s a good reminder that it only takes moments to practice some mindfulness.
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Dear Jennifer
Thank you for reading and commenting. Mindfulness is a very useful aid to living at peace with yourself. I’m not very good at it, but even so it helps me live joyfully.
With very best wishes
Penny
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A story to be proud of, timeless and yet back up to date. Well done.
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Dear Michael
What a lovely comment! Thank you!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Beautiful spiritual scene. I love the ” nothingness that holds all things.” She must be very worriied for him.
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Dear Andi
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re right – she’s very worried for her husband, but mindfulness/meditation enables her to continue living with tranquillity.
I visited Japan last year, and I was struck by the way spiritual and aesthetic concerns matter to the average Japanese person. I wrote a little about it in my blog at the time – it’s in the archives for March/April 2017 if you’re interested.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Very descriptive, loved the prayer ritual and how the story ended.
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Dear Piyali
Thank you for reading and commenting. The prayer ritual I describe is used in Japan at Shinto shrines. I’m glad you liked the way the story ended.
With best wishes
Penny
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Loved this one, Penny. Daily prayers are a good thing. We’ve much to be thankful more and many who need our petitions for safety and health.
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Amen to that, Russell. And thank you for reading and commenting; I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Fingers crossed for his safe return. Quite a difference between her serene surroundings and his fire battling.
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Dear Ali
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re quite right about the difference in their surroundings. You’ve prompted me to wonder whether I could have consciously harnessed the power of that difference to make the story stronger.
With very best wishes
Penny
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“nothingness that holds all things” Wow that’s so very well put! I do hope they come back soon.
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Dear Dahlia
Thank you for reading and for your kind comment. I’m glad you liked “nothingness that holds all things.” I hope Tatsuya comes home safe and sound soon, too.
And isn’t it fun that we both had a Japanese main character this week!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Oh! I didnt notice the coincidence 😀
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I enjoyed this piece. Great realistic fiction.
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Dear Yarnspinnerr
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Lovely – I wish I could empty my mind like that!
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Dear Liz
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
If you really wanted to learn how to empty your mind like that, Buddhist groups sometimes run courses on how to meditate, and their techniques are effective.
With very best wishes
Penny
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A Japanese style tale it is only when I read ‘rice plants’ that I think that is what they are. It is what we see beyond the picture that opens the door on your imagination. Nicely done
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Dear Ellen
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you thought the story was nicely done. I visited Japan last year, and I was very impressed by the spirituality of many of the people. The ritual is typical of how you invoke the kami of a Shinto shrine.
With best wishes
Penny
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You are most welcome.
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A timely write about very topical subjects.
Nicely done, Penny. The power of prayer.
Isadora 😎
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Dear Isadora
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you felt the story was timely. With very best wishes.
Penny
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Dear Penny,
I love the way you layered life between the lines of her prayers. Lovely use of the prompt as well. Good job. Amen and amen. 😉
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful and helpful comments. I’m glad you liked the way I layered life into the prayers.
Shalom
Penny
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I really love the way you set this up, with the action at the end. Great closing sentence.
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Dear Linda
Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful comment. I’m glad you liked the way the dramatic ‘action’ came at the end.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I really felt the sense of peace and a hope.
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Dear Laurie
Thank you for reading and commenting. The prompt left me with a feeling of hope, so I’m glad that came through into my story.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Beautifully written, and topical too. Excellent.
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Dear Keith
Thank you for reading and for your very kind comments.
With very best wishes
Penny
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like Neil, I also like the mood and can feel the life in the glowing green
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Dear Yvette
Thank you for reading, and for your helpful comment. Several people have commented on the ‘glowing green’, which makes me think about the power of colour in provoking specific emotions. I’ve been kind of aware of it for many years, but now it’s sprung into the foreground of my thinking.
With very best wishes
Penny
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I love how you model
Such a natural joy for always learning and humbly growing – it is so nice
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Wow, that was such a calming ritual.
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Dear Anurag
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you found the ritual calming.
With best wishes
Penny
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Liked the way you spun the tale! Worry, wait and then relief on seeing the good omen!
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Dear Ruchi
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked the way I constructed the story.
With best wishes
Penny
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Really true assured voice to this story. You took me far away then right back to the real world – quite a journey in so few words.
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Dear mjlstories
Thank you for reading and commenting so kindly. I was delighted to know that the story had led you on a journey.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Lovely story Penny. the whole thing feels like a mediation, most skilfully evoked. Great last line. Well done.
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Dear Francine
Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful comment. I tried to describe what I have experienced in practising mindfulness, while tying it in with the Shinto ritual for summoning the kami of a place.
With very best wishes
Penny
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A very full story in so few words. She starts out worried, then calms her mind and receives a sign of peace. I hope her plea is answered and Tatsuya comes home safely soon. Very nicely done. =)
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Dear Brenda
Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful comment.
With very best wishes
Penny
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You’re very welcome. Hope you are doing well! I’ve missed friends at FF during my recent travels. =)
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Enchanting and believable all at once.
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Dear Jilly
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you found the story believable.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Penny, this is wonderful and so different! I was taken in by the culture in this. I like the “nothingness that holds all things”. Somehow a tranquil image.
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Dear Fatima
Thank you so much for such a lovely comment! I love learning about different cultures around the world – that’s one reason why I like your blog (the main reason, though, is that you’re an excellent writer!). I’m glad you like “the nothingness that holds all things” – it has many layers on possible meaning, I felt, but here it was more or less explicitly referring to nirvana. As Wikipedia says “In Buddhism, liberation is achieved when all things and beings are understood to be with no Self.”
With very best wishes
Penny
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Yes, I was picturing the nirvana-like state. Or more specifically, it reminded me of ego vs true self. Somewhere in the enlightenment realm. Well, I appreciate your enthusiasm for my blog – I will take note of that feedback for future posts!
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This was so soothing to read although the end was a bit startling. I suppose life is like that.
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Dear Dawn
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you found the story soothing.
With best wishes
Penny
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This has such a soothing, peaceful feel with the mindfulness and prayer state coming across so well. To be dazzled by the rice is to know how deeply she, and the reader, has gone. The last line gives purpose and meaning to her prayers. Really strong changes of mood and feel in such a short space – well done.
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Dear Sarah
Thank you for reading so carefully and for your thoughtful comment. It’s a real boost when a reader understands exactly what the writer was attempting in a story. I’m really pleased that the dazzling made sense to you!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Beautifully crafted.
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