“What Pegman saw” is a weekly challenge based on Google Streetview. Using the location provided, you must write a piece of flash fiction of no more than 150 words. You can read the rules here. You can find today’s location on this page, from where you can also get the Inlinkz code. This week’s prompt is Yellowstone Park.
A Wrong Turning
Dave opened the first monitoring point, which was wreathed in acrid steam from the ground.
“See, Chuck, just put the big steel key in the slot and turn clockwise until it clicks. There! Hear it?”
Chuck nodded.
“That’s reset the gauge. We do that every day; the magma’s moving and so is the ground.”
They picked their way between hot springs and geysers to a dozen gauges.
“You can do it yourself tomorrow, if you like.”
“Cool!”
Next day Chuck had reset the first gauge before he realised he’d forgotten both map and walkie-talkie.
Oh.
Which way to the next gauge? Right – or left?
“Dave, where’s Chuck?” Dave’s boss was anxious. “It’s two o’clock.”
“Shit. I’ll send the drone out to look.”
Chuck was relieved to hear Dave’s voice from the drone’s loudspeaker.
“Follow the drone.”
Chuck followed.
“This isn’t the laboratory!”
Dave chuckled.
“You’ve still got gauges to reset!”
No rest for him! I like how you so expertly navigate the reader from time and scene via dialogue. Nicely done!
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Dear Karen
Thank you for reading, and for your kind comment.
With very best wishes
Penny
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What else do they control, I wonder?
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Dear Josh
Thank you for reading and commenting. They don’t control anything except the gauges – which are pretty important for monitoring the magma flow beneath the caldera.
With best wishes
Penny
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I thought maybe he fell into one of those hot springs. Every now and then someone does and from what I hear, it’s a horrible way to die.
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Dear James
Thank you for reading and commenting. It can be dangerous in the active area, that’s true – and my story did rely on that for part of the tension. But Chuck, while a bit absent-minded, has a decent sense of self preservation!
With best wishes
Penny
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I’m glad. An alternate ending would have been tragic.
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Haha! That’ll teach him. The guages still need to be reset. He won’t forget the map next time. And knowing what that caldera is doing is important. It’s one of America’s super-volcanoes. Makes Mt St Helens look like a firecracker. Most cool story!
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Dear EagleAye
Thank you for reading and commenting. You’re right that we need to know what the caldera’s doing – although what the authorities will do if things start to look dangerous is anybody’s guess…I’m really flattered by your comment that this is a cool story! I’m not often accused of ‘cool’!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Your story definitely points out how important it is to pay attention. I enjoy how Dave didn’t let Chuck off the hook. Lesson learned.
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Dear Alicia
Thank you for reading and commenting. I think we all behave like Chuck occasionally, don’t we?
With best wishes
Penny
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Good one, Penny. Just because you got lost and didn’t have your map, doesn’t mean you don’t get the job done. And methinks Chuck will be better prepared next time.
Yes, thank you for not killing him off.
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Dear Dale
Thank you for reading and commenting. In my imagination, Dave was slightly getting his own back on Chuck because his own boss had bawled him out for failing to ensure Chuck’s safety.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Fair is fair in the hierarchy of work… 😉
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Your words and dialogue flowed timelessly from day to day, from gauge to gauge. and always like a happy ending.
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Dear Ivor
Thank you for reading, and for your nice comment. I’m glad that you felt my story flowed well. I like a happy ending, too; but not every time, of course!
With very best wishes
Penny
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Always my pleasure.
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Great story. The dialogue is really good.
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Dear Lisa
Thank you for reading and for your thoughtful comment. I’m glad you thought the dialogue was good.
With best wishes
Penny
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Your story took me right into the scene – I could feel the white hot steam billowing out. Very nicely painted scene Penny.
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Dear Dahlia
Thank you for reading and for your nice comment. I’ve never been to Yellowstone, but last year I saw volcanic steam jetting out of a mountain in Japan so I could imagine what Chuck and Dave were experiencing.
With best wishes
Penny
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Dear Penny,
The dialogue had me in the scene. I hope Chuck and Dave aren’t lost for long. Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Dear Rochelle
Thank you for reading and commenting.
With best wishes
Penny
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I did wonder if it was wise to send Chuck out on his own so early in his training! Well done for bringing him home safe, though I liked how you led him to the other gauges – quite right too! 🙂
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Dear Lynn
Thank you for reading and commenting. I agree with you – Dave, Chuck’s supervisor, was irresponsible in sending him out on his own!
With very best wishes
Penny
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At least they had the drone, or who knows what might have happened to Chuck! 🙂
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😉
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That’ll teach him to be ore careful next time! They could lead him around all over the place for hours 🙂
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Dear Ali
Thank you for reading and commenting. Dave would be quite mischievous enough to do as you suggest!
With best wishes
Penny
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There is a bubbling dynamic in here, Penny, that works well with dialogue. Loved the drone at the end and that feeling of how technology is invading this scenic and natural countryside but is necessary to control it, contain it. But will it…
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Dear Kelvin
Thank you for reading and commenting. I suppose the bubbling dynamic comes from my own memories of just starting in a technical career (oh, wow, that was a LONG time ago!), because you’re quite right – that dynamic is certainly in the story. There’s excitement every day as one explores one’s potential.
With best wishes
Penny
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