This is a story for the flash fiction challenge, Flash Fiction for Aspiring Writers. We are given a photo prompt that is kindly photographed by our participants and approximately 75-175 words with which to create our stories. It’s fun and everyone is invited to participate. For more information, click here.
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This week’s photo prompt is provided by Footy and Foodie. Thank you for our prompt!
Two tides
The estuary was wide, and the far shore was half-hidden by the molten gold of the setting sun. Heidi gazed across the water; such a beautiful place; so many happy memories; such heartache. Alan’s absence throbbed like an abscessed tooth. How could he have just walked out on her?
“Bastard,” she typed into her phone, thought a moment, then clicked ‘Send’.
She spent a restless night, missing his warmth, his smell, his gentle snoring. She was distracted the next day, missing his laugh, his strength, his irritating way of interrupting what she was saying.
He didn’t reply to her text.
Somehow, she drifted to the estuary again that evening. She was so wrapped up in memories that she didn’t notice his approach.
He faced her, dark-rimmed eyes apprehensive.
“I am so sorry,” he said.
Word count: 134
I do so like happy endings.
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Dear Ivor
Thank you for reading and commenting. I love happy endings too!
With best wishes
Penny
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Love it! Great writing! And, I too love happy endings. Welcome to the FFfAW challenge! We are happy you have joined us!
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Dear PJ
Thank you for reading, and for your encouraging comments. I’m happy to be taking part in the FFfAW challenge!
All the best
Penny
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Penny, I had trouble being able to publish a comment on your blog. There is a black ribbon that comes across the screen on your page that covers up the “Publish” comment button. I finally was able to but it wasn’t easy. If you don’t get many comments it could be because of this. So glad you have joined the challenge!
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Thank you for letting me know about the problem you’re having. Was this with a tablet, especially an iPad? I’ve seen the same thing when responding to comments on my iPad. There’s no problem with my laptop, though.
I’m sorry you’ve been having the problem, and thank you for persisting until you got the message through!
All the best
Penny
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Yes, I work from an iPad. Maybe that is why??
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What seemed a riptide, turned out a minor ripple.
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Nice simile, righteousbruin! Thank you for reading and commenting.
With best wishes
Penny
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Amazing how much a simple sorry can do – and yet people are so resistant to it! Nice story Penny 🙂
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Dear Dahlia
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, you are right – sorry is a very powerful word, when it is sincerely meant.
With very best wishes
Penny
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Lovely write-up and a sweet ending.
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Dear Sukri
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad you liked the ending.
With best wishes
Penny
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Welcome Penny
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Awww! Such a lovely, heartwarming ending, Penny. What is life without spontaneity?! Loved your beautiful, beautifully written story.
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Dear Moon
Thank you for reading and for your lovely comment. I’m glad you liked the ending; that photo just seemed so upbeat that I had to write a happy ending!
With very best wishes
Penny
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The everyday trials of a relationship are a rich source for stories. Nicely done Penny,
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Dear Iain
Thank you for reading and commenting. I agree about the fruitfulness of everyday trials; we all love to read about how others solve the problems we wrestle with every day. I’m glad you thought it was nicely done; that’s high praise from a writer of your calibre.
All the best
Penny
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You set up the opening scene so nicely, contrasting the blissful setting with the pain of Alan’s absence, which “throbbed like an abscessed tooth”. I was pleasantly surprised by the ending … I thought he had walked out on her for good!
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Dear Magarisa
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m glad the ending was a pleasant surprise!
With best wishes
Penny
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