What Pegman Saw – There’s a Note

I’ve stepped out of my comfort zone with this week’s story, set in Cordoba, Argentina!

“What Pegman saw” is a weekly challenge based on Google Streetview. Using the 360 degree view of the location provided, you must write a piece of flash fiction of no more than 150 words. You can read the rules here. You can find today’s location on this page,  from where you can also get the Inlinkz code.

WPS There's a Note 171104

There’s a Note

Inspector Herrera lifted the body and winced. The young woman had driven the knife so violently into her chest that the blade emerged from her back.

“There’s a note, sir.”

The handwriting was firm, towards the end almost scoring through the paper.

“Antonio,

Don’t you remember those summer nights of laughter? When La Barra played cuarteto and we danced?

Don’t you remember how we stood tall with courage and won the respect of your parents?

Don’t you remember how we became one, body and soul?

Don’t you remember?

You have betrayed my love! And for whom? For that slut Maria!

I will not live without you, Antonio; and I curse you. Not to be impotent, and your whore barren; no, you will have children – but you will bury every one of them.

And now I die, taking the first of your bastards in my body to the grave.”

26 thoughts on “What Pegman Saw – There’s a Note

  1. Jeez, that’s a dark journey, Penny. As Karen said, well written and accomplished, a tragedy and yet I can see a further story opening up here, perhaps the case wil lodge in Herrera’s head, forcing him to investigate further, untwist the story that took the girl to this end. Nice write

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    • Dear Lynn
      Thank you for reading and commenting. You make a very interesting suggestion about a further story in which Inspector Herrera investigates and untwists this story. I suspect that my take on that would be that Herrera was driven by his own demons – perhaps something about the girl’s appearance reminds him of an early love that he never got over. Anyway, he’d be gunning for Antonio…yes, here’s plenty of scope for a novel.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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      • Definitely, Penny! Herrera would have his demons as you say and perhaps this case could be too close to his own story for comfort. Perhaps he had a sister in the same predicament … Intriguing possibilities

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    • Dear Ali
      Thank you for reading and commenting. The gruesome imagery is to emphasise the emotions felt by the victim – thwarted passion, destruction of self-esteem, and rage against the person who has rejected her.
      Best wishes
      Penny

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  2. I think Penny that you should step outside your comfort zone more often! This is such a gripping chilling write and perfectly believable. Initially I was a bit skeptical about how she could drive a knife through herself but by the end of her note I could well believe it – the fury, the pain the anguish! Superbly done Penny 🙂

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    • Dear Dahlia
      Thank you for such a wonderful comment! I’m so glad that you found the emotions believable. I’m a cerebral person rather than an emotional one, and I had to reach back fifty years to find the rawness that drove this story.
      With very best wishes
      Penny

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