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A Great Prize
Subsistence farming is always unforgiving; on Norfolk Island, twelve thousand miles from where Queen Victoria reigned, weakness could mean death for the whole colony.
Jeremy saw Big Jack slip out of the prayer meeting and followed him. The cold knot in his stomach twisted tighter. He thought of Elsie – beautiful Elsie. He’d have to fight Jack tonight if he was to win her.
“Save yourself a beating. Leave Elsie alone.” Jack’s tone was matter-of-fact.
“I won’t,” hissed Jeremy.
The first punch would have flattened him – if it had landed. Jack was brutally strong, but Jeremy was quick, and he’d trained. He dodged and punched, again and again, bruising Jack’s face.
There was a gleam as Jack pulled a knife.
“That’s enough!”
Mr Fletcher and three others stepped out of the shadows.
Fletcher clapped Jeremy on the shoulder.
“Pay your court to Elsie, lad. She’s yours – if she’ll have you!”
I saw a fight in one of the Expendables movies (don’t know which one) between Jet Li and Dolph Lundgren. Of course, it was a fake and they were both in character but it illustrated what happens between small and skilled and massive and unskilled. Li held his own for a while but Lundgren finally grabbed Li bodily and lifted him in the air. There was a piece of rebar sticking vertically out of a chunk of concrete and Lundgren’s character was about to impale Li’s character on it. Sylvester Stallone’s character arrived just in time to shoot Lundgren and save Li.
If a fight goes on more than a few seconds between those two types of opponents, mass is likely to win. That said, if you could get Mohammad Ali and Bruce Lee, both in their prime, in the ring with each other, I’d have no idea who I’d put my money on, but it would be a hell of a fight.
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I take your point James – a good big one will always beat a good little one. But suppose the big one is complacent, relies more on his reputation than skill, and is a bit of a coward as well? I’d like to think the smaller man might stand a chance!
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We’ll never know since someone intervened, which in both cases, seemed to save the day.
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Had to chime in here – I am learning thru the comments – as noted – I like how James said “mass is likely to win” – and then also see the point about the smaller one having strategy and perhaps even smart fighting skills – hm so much to ponder
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James – really enjoyed your comment (and the fiction here) – but this stood out to me: mass is likely to win
hmmmm and we were just talking about fights
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That we were.
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I always root for the little guy. Well done–vivid & tense.
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Thank you for reading and commenting, Karen.
I found writing this technically challenging, so I’m glad you found it ‘vivid’ – thank you!
With best wishes
Penny
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Oh, the “If she’ll have you” made me smile. Perhaps all the manly-man stuff has been wasted after all.
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Thank you for reading and commenting, Alicia. I’m glad that “if she’ll have you,” made you smile. You may be right – the manly-man stuff may have been wasted, but at least Jeremy now has a chance. If he hadn’t fought, Elsie may never have had the chance of choosing – it would have been Big Jack or nobody.
With best wishes
Penny
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Excellent scene. The language was engaging and authentic.
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Dear Josh
Thank you for reading and commenting. I’m so glad you liked the language and found it authentic. That’s praise indeed from a historical fiction writer like yourself!
With best wishes
Penny
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Haha Penny, I’m relatively small and gradually slowing down,so it looks like I’ll have to be extra smart, next time I’m in a duel for my lady-to-be.
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Dear Ivor
Thank you for reading and commenting; your comment made me smile! I’m sure you’ll be able to talk your way to victory, with not a punch thrown!
With best wishes
Penny
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Hmmm, I think a few of my friends would agree with you, about me, being able to talk my way to victory !!
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Daft lads should have just asked the girl in the first place – save all that fighting! I liked the idea that who you paired with was this important, that it could potentially make the difference between surviving and not. Good tone throughout and I enjoyed the dialogue too. Great story Penny
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Dear Lynn
Thank you for reading and commenting.
I’m delighted you picked up on the implication that who you paired with was so important to the colony’s survival that it gave society a legitimate voice in who paired with whom.
Yes, it would have been sensible to ask the girl and avoid the fighting!
With very best wishes
Penny
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My pleasure Penny. At least no one was seriously hurt! 🙂
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Wow, Penny. We both chose a fight. Interesting. Glad our endings are different. Well, written, with a lot of detail worked in seamlessly; however, one observation, apart from the open ending (which worked well for me. as we know nothing about Elsie), I wasn’t sure if the first paragraph: “Subsistence farming is always unforgiving; on Norfolk Island, twelve thousand miles from where Queen Victoria reigned, weakness could mean death for the whole colony.” was part of the story. I have read again without it and the story stands up. I know you are trying to scene set, but would your character think that… unless it him deliberating over the pros and cons of fighting. I enjoyed though and have no issue of big over small. Mass versus speed. Fighting style of fighting technique.
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Dear Kelvin
Thank you for reading so carefully and commenting so helpfully.
I, too, felt that the opening paragraph was a weakness. The scene needs setting, I think, because otherwise the characters’ motivations aren’t properly comprehensible. But I couldn’t think of a good way to do it. However, your comment points out that reason the paragraph doesn’t work is because it doesn’t belong to any of the story’s characters, especially Jeremy. That gives me a way to improve it! Thank you so much!
With best wishes
Penny
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What an interpretation of the theme. Loved reading it.
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Dear Namrata
Thank you for reading and commenting.
I’m delighted you enjoyed reading my story.
With best wishes
Penny
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I wonder what Elsie thinks of all this fighting! Great action scene.
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Dear Margarisa
Thank you for reading and commenting. Yes, I wonder too! I wonder if she has a soft spot for Jeremy – or if she would prefer ‘cock of the walk’ Jack!
With best wishes
Penny
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You’re welcome. They should have let her choose instead of fighting over her.
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He fights for his lady and wins! I’m glad there were others waiting in the wings to calm things down a bit.
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Dear Ali
Thank you for reading and commenting.
It was acute of you to spot the significance of the men waiting in the wings. Jeremy and Jack had been working up to this fight for some time. Prayer meeting in the church was the only social activity available so it was fairly easy for the men to keep an eye on the lads.
With best wishes
Penny
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I could picture the scene clearly – very well written Penny 🙂
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Dear Dahlia,
Thank you so much for your lovely comment!
With very best wishes
Penny
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we were just talking about fights (in a small group) and so this fiction piece is timely for me – and as noted in my chiming in with james comment – I leave thinking about this topic even more….
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Dear Prior
Please don’t take anything I say about fighting terribly seriously, because I know essentially nothing! This piece is more about the way the individual is constrained by social pressures than about fighting.
With best wishes
Penny
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Anhhh – thanks and it is not my area either – ha! The physical fighting that is 😊 – but I know some find it sport
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