Every week, Rochelle Wisoff-Fields (thank you, Rochelle!) hosts a flash fiction challenge, to write a complete story with a beginning, middle and end in 100 words or less. Post it on your blog, and include the Photoprompt and Inlinkz (the blue frog) on your page. Link your story URL. Then the fun starts as you read other peoples’ stories and comment on them!
Photoprompt (c) C E Ayr
A failure of trust
A stone wall stood between two families’ fields. A sapling sprouted in the wall, and grew to be a mighty oak. After hundreds of years the tree perished, men cut it down, and left the stump to petrify with weather and time.
The wall was dismantled, and the two fields it had separated became one. The families worked together, prospered, and grew to love each other.
But some family members still disliked and mistrusted the other family. Now they’re rebuilding the wall, piling old stones about the stump and talking about the days the oak stood alone, tall and proud.
Lovely story, Penny. Sad for the two families , though .
Did you intend the Oak tree to be a source of wisdom , spreading its roots of good will , resulting in temporary friendliness between the two families?
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There are many possible interpretations, and yours is a good one, Moon – but not the one that I had in mind. Because you’re right, the oak tree is symbolic. Thank you for commenting.
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Sorry, I read the tags now and am able to comprehend and appreciate your story better now .
Great work.
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Sign of our times..?
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Very much so. A political allegory for the present day. Thank you for the comment.
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Dear Penny,
I can’t help but feel a sense of loss at the building of the wall. Well written.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thank you for the kind comment, Rochelle. I’m always in favour of removing barriers between people.
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It does seem like this is a metaphor for the times we live in. Well written.
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Thank you, Iain. It is indeed an allegory.
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What a shame, it was going so well! Nicely told.
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Thank you for the comment, Clare. It’s astonishing how a few unscrupulous people can spoil things for the rest of us, isn’t it?
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So sad, and it does indeed read like a metaphor for our world, when people who should unite rather go their separate ways. Clever writing.
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Thank you. I thought the photoprompt had a rather melancholy feel, hence the choice of subject.
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Human nature strikes again.😶
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Thank you for the comment, Christine. I hate it when fear, and prejudice and plain old self-interest win out – but I’m inspired by the other side of human nature which can be incredibly courageous, generous and clear-sighted. I’m sorry for the rather downbeat tone of the post.
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Hi Penny,
I didn’t pick up the political overtones until Moon mentioned the tags and that intented meaning came to the fore. I still really like it as more of a metaphorical piece.
I have been on a virtual tour of London lately and while researching Westminster Abbey, came across the Green Man and I thought you might be interested in this. I’d never heard of him before, although I have seen him on garden plaques. Indeed, I think my garden needs one.
http://www.greenmanenigma.com/history.html
xx Rowena
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Hi Rowena,
Thank you for the diligence with which you read the story, and the comments, and the tags. The political dimension helped me structure the story, and gave me some emotional energy, but the more general interpretation was also intended. After all, our Friday Fictioneers efforts are read everywhere from Australia to Alaska, so we can’t write too parochially!
Thank you, too, for the Green Man link. I glanced through it, and then bookmarked it for later. These archetypes are fascinating, aren’t they?
xx Penny
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I do try to read at least 20 flash fictions every week and read them thoroughly. I find this really helps me, as much as the author. Being so short, it’s achievable most weeks.
The Green Man fascinates me and I’m trying to think of how I can use him. I’ve found a few resin plaques and I’m wanting to put one up in my garden. It desperately needs his help.
xx Rowena
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Sounds like the Hatfield and McCoys, they was restless mountain boys. . . .all too believable.
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Thank you for the comment, Granonine!
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I believe it was Robert Frost who famously wrote, “Good fences make good neighbors.” Guess that’s what’s happening with the current generation.
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Thank you for commenting, James.
Taking a slightly larger excerpt from the Robert Frost poem puts a slightly different slant on the traditional proverb.
“He only says, ‘Good fences make good neighbors.’
Spring is the mischief in me, and I wonder
If I could put a notion in his head:
‘Why do they make good neighbors? Isn’t it
Where there are cows? But here there are no cows.
Before I built a wall I’d ask to know
What I was walling in or walling out,
And to whom I was like to give offense.”
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It reads as a tale of our times, but they say ‘what goes around comes around’ so one day, maybe…
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Thank you for the comment, Keith.
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Working together for the common good is a principle that people find very hard to assimilate.
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That’s very true, Jane. Thank you for the comment.
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🙂
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Family – you can’t get away from them but at least they are predictable!
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Thank you for the comment, Nan!
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Very well done, and yes a sad tale for our times 😦
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Thank you, Hombre, you’re very kind!
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Like that old saying, “Love your neighbor as yourself, but don’t take down your fences.” I’d say that’s about right for the folks in this story. Nice work, Penny. 🙂
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Thanks for the comment!
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Well done. I got the political idea without the tags which means, in my mind, the story was nicely written.
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Thank you, Alicia. That comment means a lot to me.
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It is human nature to mess with peace, it would seem. Well done.
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Thank you for the comment, Dale. Wherever somebody’s self-interest is served by confrontation we have the risk that they will try to stir up trouble.
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Yes… Although this is a political comment, it also reads like a tale for sharing with children. May be we should. Perhaps the next generation could be wiser.
Well written Penny.
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I’m glad you spotted that, Fluid Phrase. The storyline continues beyond the words into questions, and there’s certainly a children’s story there somewhere!
As for the next generation being wiser – I feel cautiously optimistic. When I grew up, it was a crime to be gay. Even nice people used the N word about people of colour. These things are hard to imagine today. I think things will keep improving.
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I sincerely hope so…
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What a great story! It’s unfortunate but there are always those who think the worse and act upon it. I hope they don’t get the upper hand and that peace will remain. :o)
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Thank you for your comment. I’m glad you liked the story!
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Loved your story. I truly hope they stay at peace 🙂
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Thank you for your appreciative comment. I, too, hope they stay at peace, and maybe one day that wall will come down again!
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Oh no… not a wall. Sad for both families. I hope the beauty of the oak and the rock will make them see sense
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I’m afraid so. Some folks don’t know when they’re well-off.
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This story captures the smallness of certain men and how greed and selfishness spoil their happiness. Beautifully written.
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Thank you for the lovely compliment, Neel!
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This was a beautiful metaphor for the world we currently inhabit. There are so many people that want to go back to the good old days and have forgotten they we not really good.
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Thank you for commenting, Life Lessons. You’re right, I fear, but – there’s always a choice, and our individual choices can make a difference.
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It seems that separation and reconciliation come in cycles. Really enjoyed your story.
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Thank you for the comment, Margarisa. I’m glad you enjoyed the story.
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You are welcome, Penny.
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To be able to survive alone and stand tall like an oak tree or any other tree one has to be complete in oneself, make do with whatever one is handed. How many can actually do that? It is great to be want to be like a tree but can one adopt the philosophy of a tree, where the real journey is within? A thought provoking post Penny 🙂
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Thank you for the comment, Dahlia. People will use the symbol of the strength of a tree with no thought for the implications – if they think they can gain from it, I fear.
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Loved the use of the tree as a metaphor. Sadly, this happens all the time, the building of walls.
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Thank you for the comment, justjoyfulness. I agree about the building of walls. Still, no wall lasts for ever; we can take comfort from that.
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I hope the beaut of the oak and the stone will do them assure signified This was a beautiful metaphor for the domain we currently inhabit.
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